Teen Poetry #4 |
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HappyPretender Junior Member
since 2001-03-06
Posts 38Prince George, VA |
Gone When I lost you I lost everything Nothing else matters No one has a clue What hurts the most Is I don't have you. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Hmm... I don't think it's healthy to put so much into one person other than yourself. I think that you should try to regain some self-respect and do without the person, you may have become addicted to them. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
short but went straight to the point..great job and keep writing.. ...? if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
twas short and powerful! love thos hope everything bes okays with yous *hugs* give me a hollaw if ya ever needs to talks! tiff “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
"addictated" allan..... This was a VERY good poem. I understand your hurt because ive lost everything...when I lost my bestfriend. Youll get through it. if u ever need to talk email me or something Regina "Take a look at my face, there's no price I won't pay |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
i really liked this a lot. i thought it was very good,it was short yet powerful. i can fully relate to this. i am adding this to my library.i hope things get better for ya. It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Give it time and someone will come to your life and make you happy again stay strong and keep writing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very simply written, but a lot of emotion in this one. I enjoyed it. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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baby0508 Member
since 2001-05-16
Posts 58Moodus, Connecticut |
Trust me, I know exactly how you feel. It is so hard to get over losing someone you love so much. My bf of one year just broke up with me, i am devistated and your poem made me cry.
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