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Ender
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0 posted 2001-05-11 11:46 AM


I cant stop thinking of you
Your beauty captivating my mind
Surrounding it
Filling it with dreams
Fantasies
About you
I cant seem to think about anything else
Nothing strays my mind
From you

You are everything to me
My world around me
And inside of me
You are peace
Love
Beauty
Everything that counts
Everything that make you who you are

I want to be with you
Your voice captivates my heart
Your love controls my thoughts
You are the goddess of love
The queen of beauty


You are of a rare type
Not many like you
Which makes you more beautiful
And more priceless
A buried treasure
Unlike any in the world today

I am glad I found you
I grateful to know you
I am lucky to share your love

*Blonde people are normal. Everyone else is just strange. -Ender*

© Copyright 2001 Richard Melick - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-05-11 11:48 AM


How sweet! She must have loved this.  
Ender
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2 posted 2001-05-11 11:51 AM


LOL....i hope she does cause i just sent it to her....*fingers crossed*

*Blonde people are normal. Everyone else is just strange. -Ender*

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3 posted 2001-05-11 12:01 PM


this is really sweet and very beautiful,  i know she will love it, you have nothing to worry about.  great job on this, and good luck with the girl.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Ender
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4 posted 2001-05-11 02:46 PM


Thanx everyone.  All the comments mean alot to me.

If I could be anything in the world, I would want to be your tear.  I would be born in your eyes, live on your cheek, and die on your lips.  -Ender

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5 posted 2001-05-11 03:05 PM


  Aww...how sweet! This was very thoughtful..I liked it lots. I'm sure she will too.
  ~Carly

"Your joy is your sorrow unmasked.  And the self-same well from which your laughter rises was often-times filled with your tears."   ~Kahil Gibran

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6 posted 2001-05-11 03:26 PM


that was a good poem. keep it up.
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7 posted 2001-05-11 06:35 PM


Great work.... I hope you did send this to her, it's really touching.     
Best of luck with all of that.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

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8 posted 2001-05-11 11:01 PM


So how much did she love it?  Good job on the poem, it's done well.

"Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato.

Ender
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9 posted 2001-05-11 11:21 PM


SHE LOVED IT!!!!  YAY!!!!

If I could be anything in the world, I would want to be your tear.  I would be born in your eyes, live on your cheek, and die on your lips.  -Ender

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10 posted 2001-05-12 12:49 PM


sweet pooem..nice job and i'm gald that she liked it a si did...good luck:wink...and keep writing.. ...?

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11 posted 2001-05-12 03:13 AM


How could she NOT love this?! I mean, wow! This is so beautiful!!   SEA
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12 posted 2001-05-12 07:10 AM


Awwww, I know this feeling....I've had it before.... this is sooooo cute.
I'm glad she liked it.

Jenn

"I've come too close to happiness, to have it swept away,don't think I can take the pain, never fall again..." Janet

katherine
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13 posted 2001-05-12 09:24 AM


of course she liked how could she not!
shes so lucky to have someone who feels that way about her! hope it all works out well.
it's such a sweet poem!
kate

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14 posted 2001-05-12 11:17 AM


*claps* im a little late..sorry.

This was amazing...this reminds me of Brad.Lol...........
Awesome work.!!!
Im glad she loved it!

Regina

"Take a look at my face, there's no price I won't pay
To say these words to you"bon jovi

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15 posted 2001-05-12 12:06 PM


awwwwwws this is sooooooooooo sweetish
im glad she likeds it!!! woo hoo 4 u  
hope all works out with u 2:P lols
tiff

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"u say i only here wut i want too..."

Angel Bee
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16 posted 2001-05-12 01:23 PM


this was sweet, keep writing,
~ab~

*~"Sometimes I wish I was a little girl again--because bruised knees heal faster than broken hearts."~*

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17 posted 2001-05-14 06:13 PM


Good for you
It actually was a given that she'd like this
who wouldn't?  

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

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18 posted 2001-05-14 07:04 PM


i love this poem!! anyone who gets a poem like this is so lucky. im glad she liked it  
Ender
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19 posted 2001-05-14 08:09 PM


thank you so much everyone...this means alot to me

If I could be anything in the world, I would want to be your tear.  I would be born in your eyes, live on your cheek, and die on your lips.  -Ender

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20 posted 2001-05-15 12:20 PM


Very, very, very sweet.  A great read indeed (hehe i just rhymed!) and I most def. enjoyed this one.  

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

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21 posted 2001-05-16 01:57 AM


I really enjoyed this poem. Quite the sweet one!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Ender
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22 posted 2001-05-16 10:05 AM


WOW!!!  I never thought that my poetry could get so many replies.  thank you all so very much

If I could be anything in the world, I would want to be your tear.  I would be born in your eyes, live on your cheek, and die on your lips.  -Ender

Voyce
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23 posted 2001-05-16 10:07 AM


Great poem man. Very touching and strait forward
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24 posted 2001-05-16 11:28 AM


Great poem... and what everyone else already said... I always get here late  
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