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Dilated Ego
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Dilated Ego |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair 
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Wrote this in chemistry, hope you like. Enjoy. "Dilated Ego" Validity dwells in your ego, Making sounds of authority. Yelling, banging and panting Strangling the minority. Infer not to suited men, They’re red-thirsty now. Abandon they’re fictitiousness, As they take a bow. High appreciation is never Self- esteem, when it’s overfilled. That’s called indulgence in self, As again your head builds. To see a face; known as you, Depicted in yellow writing Would leave you drifting above, Choking on retorts and despising. Never again resort to your shady plans, While blood drips, from your body, Vengeance makes you inferior to me, You begin to sulk, in infamy. J.D. Raulinaitis 1/22/01 "Is it love in my gut, or piss in my bladder?" -Allan Riverwood |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
This was great! i don't care if you wrote it in chemistry or what. you could of wrote it in the bathroom while you were makin' a floatie for all i care. LMAO!  this was awesome. you always write good stuff.~Valerie~ *...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
As per usual you have out done yourself again Jeremy. Its good to see those chemistry lessons are really starting to pay off. *L* Interesting little lines in there that really made me think. This is a good thing...poetry that makes me think actually makes the brian work occasionally. Keep it up. ~AF~ "Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment." Buddha |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Hey, oucho. As an egotistical person, i must say that this was offensive! Good poem though. *sulks in infamy -Allan |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was a nice one jer. You write with such words that I personally could not even come up with if I had a great imagination. haha. Nice one here though, the poem was nice.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Wow!!! This is really good Probably the best of yours I've read so far I don't see that many replies, but believe me in saying, it's their loss "Infer not to suited men, They’re red-thirsty now. Abandon they’re fictitiousness, As they take a bow. High appreciation is never Self- esteem, when it’s overfilled. That’s called indulgence in self, As again your head builds." Magnificent writing JD I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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litle_krazy_poet Member
since 2001-01-17
Posts 71 |
i loved the poem sepically when you say Vengeance makes you inferior to me, that is so true thanks for the poet somethings need poems and then there are thoes that are just for fun |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
JEREMY!!!! Strangling the minority. Ouch...man these words were so incredbly powerful. PLEEZE keep posting. For the sake of my reading.. ~Carly inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog... |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Hey shouldn't you be doing Chemistry during Chemistry?  Naw, not when you have something this good dancing around in your head. I'm glad you took the tyme to write it down and share it with us. Nice work ~Jason "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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