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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
cry a river for me let one more drop fall why are you stopping its not time yet keep them coming prove that you care cry a river for me dont let me stop you you know i love you im your best friend dont worry i understand its all good, itll be ok cry a river for me dont ever stop you pull it off very well your fake tears and all cry a river for me just let one more drop fall WOO HOO!!!!IM OUTS OF SKOOL NOWS!!!!!“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
the repition in this piece is used really well, i like the mood of this piece a lot. you've written some sad things lately, i hope everything is ok with you  Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
This was very good..... no fair...i got 21 more days with exams!!!!  Regina "Take a look at my face, there's no price I won't pay |
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5_sweet_kisses Junior Member
since 2001-04-20
Posts 49 |
AWW!!!TIFF!! that was great hun.. *licks you* i wish i could write good poems.. i stink at them.. you are a great friend of mine and im glad you are.. bc without you i think i would miss out on a great friendship.. *hugs* just wanted to let you know that. GREAT POEM!! |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I agree, the repitition was perfect in this piece. Very good work, Tiff!  And nice to see you out of skools!  ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
gawd...30 sumthing days..and finals..how will i survive??? anyways good poem...i knwo those fake tears ppl pretend to have oh too well |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
I only got 8 or 9 days left, hehe!!! Nice poem, nice use of repitition here. Jenn "I've come too close to happiness, to have it swept away,don't think I can take the pain, never fall again..." Janet |
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ScarletPoetess Junior Member
since 2001-05-09
Posts 18 |
This is a sad poem. I hope everything's alright. You did a nice job on this piece. The emotions are strong, and pulled me in. Good job! I hurt myself today, to see if I still feel. I focus on the pain, the only thing that's real. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Wow!!! That is a really good one Enjoyed the read a lot and loves the repetitions(as others have said already) Tiff --- I'm amazed again keep it up girl "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done....I enjoyed the poem. I was officially out of school May 4th...but as far as school work was concerned....I was out April 14th.....the rest was spring break....and 11 days of pure nothingness...mwhahaha!!!!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great Poem Tiff Wonderful repition well done.Marshal Zu " The tree of liberty must be refreshed from time to time with the blood of patriots" -Thomas jefferson |
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