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Ender Member
since 1999-12-08
Posts 200Yuma, AZ USA 
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If I could be anything What would it be? Maybe teardrop I would be born in your eyes Live on you cheek And die on your lips Or maybe the flame in your heart The burning feeling of love Lighting your heart Leading the way Maybe I would be a rose Held in your hand Showing that you were loved And loving you No matter what I would be I would be in love And whatever I was I would always love you *Blonde people are normal. Everyone else is just strange. -Ender* |
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mistic Member
since 2001-05-06
Posts 233Idaho, U.S.A. |
awwww... that's really sweet.  i really liked the way this poem flowed and message that it gave. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
wow!!..great poem..i really enjoyed every word in this poem...esp.. "Maybe teardrop I would be born in your eyes Live on you cheek And die on your lips" awesome words and discription...hope to see more i loved this poem..  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
my goodness, this is such incredibly beautiful writing. this goes straight into my library. i really like the same stanza that albert quoted too, one of the most beautiful descriptions i have ever read. i hope you keep posting your work so that i can have the plesure of reading your beautiful words. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
This is quite beautiful. I enjoy what you described, changing your form by stanza (in the story, that is) and leading up to a romantic conclusion. Very creative, and excellently done. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Awww this is such a sweet poem!!! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Good job of writing the poem, it's done well "Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was very beautiful. I liked how you wrote it. Quite the sweet one.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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