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One more Kiss
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One more Kiss |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC 
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I lay in bed and watch you sleep Moments like this I treasure, these memories I keep Don’t want you to wake yet and start a new day A day of school and work, go our separate way I want to take you in my arms and hold you tight Keep you through the day so you spend another night When you lay there next to me in my bed My worries are gone, morning’s all I dread Before you, night was there just to follow day Now the only lonely night is when you don’t stay Just one more kiss before I go Cause your touch is like heaven and baby you know That every moment we’re apart is like an eternity And I won’t feel whole till you return to me My life was empty, I was alone Until the day I brought you home We closed the door, turned out the light Cuddled up and it just felt right You and me, lying there, snuggled close together Makes me think of you and me making it forever This feeling is one I’ve never had before You came into my life and unlocked so many doors Don’t worry about the rest because you found the key to my heart That’s why I pray this night will last forever, and morning never start Just one more kiss before I go Cause your touch is like heaven and baby you know That every moment we’re apart is like an eternity And I won’t feel whole till you return to me "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
very nice poem. i really liked it, fear of loosing someone, for 10 hours. a lot happens in 10 hours. i also liked your reply to tamma's poem (dont know how its called) couldnt reply there for personal reasons. San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was great.......is San replied it must be haha and i read it and liked it. Oh and keoni.....nice one for not being a hypocrit hehe.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
nice work my friend... i cant relate to what your describing but I know it means a lot to you hope that your nights with her never end nice job ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Great work here, you have expressed well the fear of morning and moving onto the days expectations... Melz!! You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already... |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
So very well said here, I think you captured the feelings very well. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Thanks for the replies, even Dopey's sarcastic one! Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
hey there. it was very good, just one more kiss, sometimes thats all we will get. sigh....there was a lot of good emotions, keep it up. Regina |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Thanx Regina, it's good to hear from you "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
Very nice poem. Imidiately made me think of my gf (just take out the whole spending the night thing anyway  ) anyway, I like this poem very much."Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \ I am lost in my own mind. |
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GirlsBestFriend Member
since 2000-12-27
Posts 71Planet Earth |
nice job! good luck. ~lotsa luv "Isn't it funny how to the world you are nothing? But then to one person..you're the world" |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
This poem is so good. i think everyone can relate to it on a personal basis.  Even me!!! hehehehe great job, i always love your work. ttyl~valerie~ *...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Wow... excellent poem Keoni. I'd say more, but I'm at a loss for words. Really touching. Eternal life without the darkness isn't life at all- it is a lobotomy. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
wow~ i really liked this. wish i had someone like that  Keep up the great work tho*dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
though i'm a failed romantic, i still say that this is very romantic I've never had that in my life, the chance to watch someone sleep and thoughts just run thru you It's either i fall asleep first, or i wake up last still, beautiful poem......very beautiful I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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