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Lookin' At Stars
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Lookin' At Stars |
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GirlsBestFriend Member
since 2000-12-27
Posts 71Planet Earth |
There was a day When I was looking at stars Wide Heven Perfect Eyes Sense of magic Laying back and still trying.. To forget you Act like if nothing's wrong But why do I sing? Does it make me strong?? Sayin' life is a flower Haven't heard yer voice for long Now...wind sounding like music to ear Sitting on soil Drawin' circles randomly Thinking of the reason Why don't I feel my soul? Needin' someone goodlistener Then failed me tellin' So the problem in me Seems will never change You felt the same?! Just ignore it then! Anyway know this: Forever I'm your friend ~lotsa luv "Isn't it funny how to the world you are nothing? But then to one person..you're the world" |
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Ski*Chick Member
since 2001-01-13
Posts 141Fitchburg, Mass, Usa |
I really liked your poem, keep writing them Min  |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
This is Brilliant... what else can I say... I am lost for words... (Now there's a first!!!) Melz!! You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already... |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
I really liked this one. Super job ~Carly inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog... |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
you know i love your work! this is top-notch writing from ya!! LOL ~**Valerie**~ *...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was great. I felt like you were takin the reader from left to right in thoughts, yet at the same time keeping one foot in the middle the whole time. Very good poem.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
GBF, I cant read you whole poem but so far it sounds really wonderful i will come back later when i am not feeling so down and tell you what i think. |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
nice work GBF... I enjoyed reading your words keep writing us more treats ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This one is good, nice job  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
most enchanting read if i may say simple poem, but written in complicated feelings hope to see you share more of you work thanks for the read I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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