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Legend Night (It's been a while!)
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Legend Night (It's been a while!) |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair 
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Well hello guys n gals. How are ya? Well Id figure Id write something cuz its been a while since Id post. This is about the first night that me and my current girlfriend came together...hope you like. Enjoy. 'Legend Night' A wondrous night, but not so quite, It's more than that, it's supreme at least. Words speechless at detailing the sight, Silence died, but romance never ceased. The sweetest thing, I've yet to taste, Sugar finished lips pressed upon mine. Shivers of delight, around they raced, Encircling upon me where they resign. First night with you, a sky to share, A time in unison, and a song we sang. All is described, with love in the air, As we endure the bells that rang. A night of specialty-- night of lust. Leads a path, a road to affection, Now revealed between the two of us, Taking us towards a lovely direction! Jeremy D. Raulinaitis "War, what is it good for? Absolutely nothing!" - Edwin Starr |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
BEAUTIFUL!! Greta work Jeremy! i LOVE it  it is so pure and sweet great to see your work again!*Justine* -=Love starts with a SMILE, grows with a KISS, and ends with a TEAR=- |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
JEREMY! MY MAN!   *runs over and lifts Jeremy in the air in a big bear hug* Where the hell have you been, bro? We all missed you loads, you and Mr Knightfellow... As you can see PIP is a lot different these days, all the old faces gone (except a few, like me and Javier... hehe...) and we're packed with newbies. It's a really different experience! A lot more females than we used to have, to be blunt. I'm not complainin'.  This poem reminded me of your unique style... great flow without use of meter. It's hard to do but you always pull it off so well, it's curiously admirable. The descriptions you used in here also lined it greatly... nice work man! So stick around for a while maybe? ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
nice job..what a beautiful poem..i really liked it..thanks for sharing and keep writing...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
Whoa, nice work man. Too long a while since we've seen you. There should really be more poems here if for nothing else to offset my dark sidedness. Keep it up and don't take so long to post again!! "It's too cold in the world...too cold to be alone..." - >¶Øʆ< |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Jeremy!!!!!!!!!!!! I don't know wether to be extremely ticked off at you for robbing us of your talent for so long, or elated that you've decided to return.....I've settled on a happy medium. It's awesome to see your work again, don't leave like that EVER or I'll just have to beat you with a tuna.... ~Carly  "Your joy is your sorrow unmasked. And the self-same well from which your laughter rises was often-times filled with your tears." ~Kahil Gibran |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
school computers really, really suck. [This message has been edited by Child of the Stars (edited 05-10-2001).] |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
*dances* [This message has been edited by Child of the Stars (edited 05-10-2001).] |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
i saw a bunch of your responses on some of the older poems i've read and i wondered what happended to you i like this poem a lot and i really hope that you decide to stick around and keep sharing your work with us. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
The imagery in this one is quite good. I like the way it flows. It's kind of a loose iambic form. Nice work here. Glad to see your writing here again. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Good job on this jeremy, and it's excellent to see you back. I was starting to wonder where you went, it was almost time to get the emails out "Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Well, it's nice to see you again in here. You haven't lost your touch I see. Hope you're back for good. keep sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
oooo la la...u go jeremy!! LoL Well im glad you finally showed your face here again!! Where have ya been??? Well ya came back with a bang boy....wonderful! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
DUDE!!!!! Nice to see you here. I hope it's for good again..... Anyhow, carly stole my dance moves....I hate her now haha... Great poem, shows your true appreciation for the woman you love. I wish you luck! Dude, stick around here. I been wondering where ya been....hope to see more, much more!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
Well, this was just beautiful... ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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