Teen Poetry #4 |
Afraid |
knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
afraid scared to death i hide from you in the dark where you cant see cant see me ill be safe in the dark you wont find me i made sure this time i escaped you escaped death i hide from you in the dark where you cant see ...but neither can i “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
nice job i thought the way you wrote this one was quite creative...good job and keep writing.. ...? if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Hmm... nice twist on the ending but it's not the greatest poem I've seen from you. It kinda lacked a little of the magic I'm used to reading. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
The format of this was really neat and that made this an interesting read, but i felt like this poem just didn't have enough in it. i would love to see you write more poetry in this style though, i really like the way you wrote this. keep posting your writing Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
You poems have shown me so much pain inside. And I do wonder why you hide from this particular person. Hope things to get better "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Oooo twisty...i like that!! It was a very intense poem which i love...my stomach is doin a weird thing now lol great one here |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Don't be afraid tiff, i'm here Well done on the poem. You expressed this well. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
Ooooh the last line was kinda spooky and mysterious! I like that! ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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