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sleepymoongirl Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 157bc canada |
(this is an older poem) As I look at life today Nothing feels the same A burden is lifted Just knowing soon I will Have someone to listen Thinking though about this pain That seems to block my way I have to pretend it is not there For I have been here so long I am stuck I can't move I feel traped helpless It's almost like I can't breathe I still don't know Where these wounds come from Or do I but don't want too I am forever hidding From my problems As I hide It slowly eats away at my soul Will I ever come out and enjoy life I will put my wounds away For today is not the day as u go in life there will be ur hardships it is up to u if it makes u or breaks u. [This message has been edited by sleepymoongirl (edited 05-11-2001).] |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Uhh... the last line didn't really communicate with me. I don't think the sentence made sense, was that a typo? Otherwise, nice job. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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sleepymoongirl Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 157bc canada |
what typo? |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
is it 'today IS not the day' ? newayz.....great job scarlet. i like this hun. i like seeing some of your older work and your newer stuff.....shows the changes in you and stuff. cant wait for more hun. love you *Hugs* tiff  “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” U in the dark u in the pain u on the run Living a hell living ur ghost living ur hell [This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (edited 05-10-2001).] |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
nice job and i do also think the last line didnt quite get thru my head as a verse anywasy..i thought you did quite well..on this..keep writing...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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sleepymoongirl Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 157bc canada |
oh my gosh yes it is tifferz |
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broken wing Junior Member
since 2001-04-30
Posts 37 |
i enjoyed this! broken "To me, fair friend, u never can be old, |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
She's got..hiiiigh hopes, she's got...hiiigh hopes, she's got high, apple pie in the skyyyy hopes... Awesome poem.. "I still don't know Where these wounds come from Or do I but don't want too" That was very..eh..what's the word..ok I'll just say cool for lack of better terminology.  ~Carly "Your joy is your sorrow unmasked. And the self-same well from which your laughter rises was often-times filled with your tears." ~Kahil Gibran |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great poem and I loved your last line "today is not the day" great stuff hope to see more Zu " The tree of liberty must be refreshed from time to time with the blood of patriots" -Thomas jefferson |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked the poem. Good job on it!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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