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Jenabou
Member

since 2000-06-13

Posts 215
Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA

0 posted 2001-05-09 06:33 PM

Smeared mascara stain her cheeks
as the tears pour from her eyes
she knows the time has come
to say her last good-bye
6 bittersweet years she spent in this town
she smiled and laughed ,cried and frowned
made memories that will last a lifetime
letting go and leaving it all behind
it's hard to pretend she's doing fine
She fell so deeply into love
and got her heart torn to bits
she carefully put it back together
and is ready to take another hit
she made so many friends,and few enemies
in this town that brought her joy and sorrow
she knows she'll be far away tomorrow
she stares out the window as her life fades to a backdrop behind her
theres nothing left to do but wave good-bye
and turn her heart around to her new life ahead....

The world is like a mirror; frown at it, and it frowns at you. Smile and it smiles, too
Be kind,for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle

[This message has been edited by Jenabou (edited 05-09-2001).]

banburycross
Senior Member

since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

1 posted 2001-05-09 08:22 PM

i loved the way you started this, the imagery in the opening was really excellent. i also like the mood of this one, the feeling in the piece was wonderful. great job on this, keep writing

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

ethel lahootie
Member

since 2001-03-06

Posts 143
SC, USA

2 posted 2001-05-09 08:27 PM

i really enjoyed this...good job!

EtHeL

lonely*soul
Member

since 2001-04-05

Posts 396
east haddam (moodus) ct :)

3 posted 2001-05-09 08:39 PM

sounds like sumone just graduated and is leaving for college..or not

lol good job

*KiMMiE*

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

4 posted 2001-05-09 08:47 PM

here's to a bright future full of adventure!!

SEA

Suga_Baby
Member

since 2000-08-06

Posts 380
Maine, USA

5 posted 2001-05-09 09:08 PM

I really like this... I don't know if this is what it's about, but it makes me think of a little over a year from now, when I will be going off to college and leaving behind all my friends...

But, all goodbye's are a part of growing, and they are a part of life! Well done

,
Suga

"A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep."

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

6 posted 2001-05-09 11:44 PM

I also thought of leaving school for college... although I wouldn't be leaving anyone behind really. So long as I have my computer and Net access I'm fine.

Nice work on the poem.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

7 posted 2001-05-10 03:24 AM

i think you double posted this lol...anyways..i just wanted to say that even tho you might have kwnon already and if you want to know what i said about this poem...its in the other post...hah..yea keep writing tho...

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

Tamma

Senior Member

since 2000-01-17

Posts 794
In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV

8 posted 2001-05-10 06:50 AM

This made me wanna cry! Its so sad, but towards the end, I pictured a girl in a pickup truck(sorry, that'd be the redneck in me) looking out the rearview mirror at the town shes leaving behind.

Those girls on TV don't know that being
36-24-36 doesn't mean a thing unless
you got the face to back it up

branden726

Senior Member

since 2000-09-25

Posts 607
Bay City, MI

9 posted 2001-05-10 06:56 AM

This was sad but AWSOME i liked this one, had to re-read it 2 times cuz i couldnt believe whats up with that its just so great.

vixengrl04
Member

since 2001-04-26

Posts 495
East Haddam, CT

10 posted 2001-05-10 10:43 AM

This was written really well; i liked it. Good luck with your future endeavors.

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

Jenabou
Member

since 2000-06-13

Posts 215
Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA

11 posted 2001-05-10 03:34 PM

yeah aparently this got double posted?!?! hahaah i don't get it

thank you all very much
im actualy only in grade 10...im not graduating
my dad got transfered and im moving to oklahoma this summer
thats what this is about

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

12 posted 2001-05-12 11:32 PM

What a hard situation to be in
Leaving behind all that you love
Is this a temporary leave or permanent?
hope you move on smoothly
take changes as good and not bad
thanks for sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

13 posted 2001-05-16 06:07 PM

i really enjoyed this one. Well done on it.
Im graduating this year....oh well hehe.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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