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artemis_selene Junior Member
since 2001-05-07
Posts 14virginia |
another attempt at free verse... that shining, flashing, waxing moon placed upon your forehead at birth gleams like a beacon of purity and wholeness of spiritandmindandbody but it is also a warning: only a twin star can take its place in your celestial skies. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
very neat....I like this one  |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
great job on the attempt in freeverse but i think you did alright...i liekd it and keep writing   ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
This is interesting, I like the way you used "a crescent shaped moon". Good job, I think you did well. ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
this was very creatively done, i like this a lot. this was certainly a piece that gave me pause and made me think. keep posting all your poetry Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Nice job. I might do an "attempt" at free verse sometime myself... this inspired me to at least try. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
This is a really good attempt, maybe next time you can write longer ones. I'd love to see those "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hey this was great. I really feel that you do free verse very well. I enjoyed this.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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