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ScarletPoetess Junior Member
since 2001-05-09
Posts 18 |
Struggling Searching for that string of strength, That ounce of perspective. Demons tossing me with full force Draining motivation, altering ability to succeed. That frail being in the corner Sinking into the wall, Yearning to release this brokenness to vanish Become unified with this state of nothing, of everything. That stocky giant, unexplainable outcast, molding into the chair, crying with her laugh, hoping to be recognized. Insides, outsides swollen to extremes, pain corresponding with this extensive fat tissue... A dreamer, unlike the average adolescent creature Knowing of her her horrible incabability Knowing of her unique wisdom Curious about her inaccurate self hatred destructs self, strengthens no one. I hurt myself today, to see if I still feel. I focus on the pain, the only thing that's real. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Welcome!  Powerful first post! Please check your email for a special greeting SEA |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Very nice work! What dark imagery, it made me shiver with delight... I really like the strong and effective emotion you portrayed in this piece, and the way that you layed it all out to a free-versish poem that was formatted by line sizes was really creative and complimented the poem beautifully. Welcome to Passions in Poetry. I really look forward to your next post in here! Have fun reading, replying and sharing with the rest of us! ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
Weclome to Passions!! your first post is incredible, i really love the images that it evoked in my mind and the words are filled with feeling. i'm glad you've decided to join us here, i look forward to reading more of your work in the future. you have a lot of talent, keep sharing with us Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!! Your first post has put a dent in me already I'm very impressed thanks for sharing I hope you enjoy this place as much as we all do Hope to read more of your work "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
wow!!!...powerful poem..there and welCOME TO PASSions..i really enjoyed this poem..and the person you discribed was like you were discribing me..anyways tho..this was agreat first post...keep writing   ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, Welcome to Passions! This poem is really good I enjoyed reading it and I hope to see more of your work. Because this is so good I am putting it in my library. Until your next poem -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Welcome to Passions Great job on your first post here! I hope you stay around and post more for us. "Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato. |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
There's nothing like a poem like this to introduce yourself to Passions! WELCOME!! This was a really impressive and powerful first post and I can't wait to see more. Great job!! ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey Babe, Since I haven't seen you on pip in a while figured I would ask you on your first passions poem where are you haha okay I am waiting for your next poem *holds his breath* if you dont want me to die them you will post soon *turns blue* very soon  okay talk to you later babe-- Me "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
wElCoMe tO paSsiOns hey there!! Great first post Keep on postin aight??? Cant wait to see what else you got in store for us!! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was simply wonderful! The ending hit me hard. Very powerful! I truly enjoyed this read. I hope to see you post more and welcome to Passions!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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