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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723
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here ya go... Boredom + time = 2 senyrus ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ This note, I still bend My guitar, my only friend This, my lonely end ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ there is no ending, crying in the arms of guilt, to this defriending ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Yes I know, "defriending" is not a word.... oh well And despite what these senyrus imply I am happy  <-see[This message has been edited by IsGona (edited 05-08-2001).] |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
"Just be honest!" - Jay, these are great. Light reading and good to see that smiley face tells us you are happy. I was afraid I was going to have to bring out some strippers or something to make you dance around with a monkey.  Defriending needs to be made a word. Write to the Oxford people and ask for their opinion. *NOTE: EJ HAS HAD A LOT OF SUGAR* ~AF~ Stupidity killed the cat. Curiosity was framed. |
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JBaker515
since 2001-02-28
Posts 458Dartmouth College |
these were cool, i liked them i think its neat that you can make up your own word.. "to this defriending".. defriending heh?? well its poetry and thats the beauty.. great job $ Jeff $ : ) |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
yea..i liekd them two senyrus and i'm glad you are happy...and you even create your own vocabualry thats very creative lol  ..anyways..keep writing   ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 05-08-2001).] |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I love the mathematical equation as a forethought. Here's another. Boredom + a lifetime = many many senryus Boredom + a lifetime + talent = Mr Riverwood And yeah, I write a whole heap of senryus. I really like these, Jay. They rhymed... which I like every now and then in senryus. It adds a neat taste to the format. Great work! ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i never get bored...cuz my mind is always keeping me busy.. [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 05-09-2001).] |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
This was really interesting, I like the way you wrote these. ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
i liked the "crying in the arms of guilt" line in the second senru, i thought that was especially good. bordom can occaisonally produce some good work and i like these two poems a lot. keep posting all your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Tangerines Junior Member
since 2001-05-07
Posts 22Richmond, Virginia |
Oh, senryuus! Japanese poetry! They're very good - I like the rhyme scheme, and your word-inventing. "I don't judge people, I just watch them till it's time to look away. I wanna look away now." - Kristin Hersh |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
defriending...hmm..its in my vocab now hehe..jason is happy!!! cute poem!*KiMMiE* |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Wahoo!!!!!! Loved them, Bubba. Peace. ~Carly "Your joy is your sorrow unmasked. And the self-same well from which your laughter rises was often-times filled with your tears." ~Kahil Gibran |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Neato burrito, these are good "Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Cute Jay, very cute! And you'd better be happy...or I'll be forced to take drastic measures. BTW... Shakespeare made up words all the time. It's true. "I've come too close to happiness, to have it swept away,don't think I can take the pain, never fall again..." Janet |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Neato burrito(((???))) SWWWWEET [(You) + (your replies) = my thanks] [My thanks/X = the end of the world] for all X where X is not equal to 0 So please nobody divide ok? lol ... ... ... ummmm... I'm sorry I just went COMPLETELY INSANE for a sec. *Back on planet earth* Seriously... thank you every one. You all rock. Thank you *points* Thank you *points* Thank you *points* Thank you *points* Thank you *points* Thank you *points* Thank you *points* Thank you *points* Thank you *points* Thank you *points* Thank you *points* [This message has been edited by IsGona (edited 05-09-2001).] |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Not Bad J, it's just that one word that got to me  All in all, you did a great job keep em coming "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
I'm pretty near to Oxford and my contacts there say that defriending will be in the next volume. Great poems, I really enjoyed the read. Zu " The tree of liberty must be refreshed from time to time with the blood of patriots" -Thomas jefferson |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
You know I like poems when I mention food somewhere in them or, not, but hey, they are good poems "Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Stop it with the equations already! Equations + Javier = PISSED OFF! Mwhahaha!!!! Anyway, I really liked the first one Jason. Well done.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Hey Dopes! Don't get pissed. Just listen to the rocking cricket playing his guitar. Stupidity killed the cat. Curiosity was framed. |
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