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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
a blanket of sparkles spread across the sky so dark and enchaniting mysterious to the eye a world of possibilities vailed by dim lights widens my brown eyes on those clear dark nights every star is an angel who just got their wings who joins the sky of seraphs and who in harmoney sings the song so sweet and silent to the ear with that sky of possiblities why must i be here i can be an angel too and finally reach my stars the huge sky of dim lights can remove all my scars start a new life living in the sky living with my angels and stars way up high' think its cheesey guys?? tell me whatcha think! *KiMMiE* |
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AngelPoet87 Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 280Indy |
Aww, I don't think its cheesy I think its cute! |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
nah...i think you did jus fine.... i like what you were trying to say in this poem..i really enjoyed this read..keep writing kim   ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I think it's beautiful what you described. Great job on the poem! ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
Kimmie Wimmie ya already know my opinion on this one, it's muy bonita!  ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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Wood_Stock Member
since 2001-05-09
Posts 58The little yellow |
I liked it. It's the first poem I've looked at tonite which actually flows. Good Stuff. (Not that the others were bad of course...!!) Yeah, not at all cheesy... |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
i don't think this is cheesy, but i do think it's well written and a beautiful thought i liked this a lot, the whole poem had a very peaceful feel to it that i enjoyed. this is a great peace, keep posting all your work.Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
My favorite amongst your poems so far Kimmie. You have shown such lovely images on this piece Such a peaceful feeling to it thanks for sharing keep it up "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought it was good. Not your best, but not your worst. Well done on it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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