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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI 
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Surpasses those who care. It rides a whim and delves within While I am standing there. I scrutinize and theorize The Maker of my frost; Conclusion that I've come to bear-- You'll find within the lost. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
awesome awesome awesome! I just love saying "anonymity" lol i like how it rolls off my tongue...i know im weird  but neways...great poem. keep it up chick!*dq **You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
I loooooove the way this one flows so smoothly. It's really good. ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
wow!!..darn..i think this poem was awesome..the flow..i cant touch on that or all the society of poets will...*run me over*..yea..i be trippen again  so..anyways..teh flow the meaning everything worked out very well..great job and keep writing them poems carly~  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
this flows sooooo well i really like the whole thing! *KiMMie* |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
"I scrutinize and theorize" Carly, Nice job on this poem, I like it. The line above amazed me, I love it Good job and keep them coming."Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Ooh...... man...... well I really like this poem a lot.... I see you using some of your favourite words.  hehe...Nonetheless an outstanding poem of yours, Miss Van Dort.  We all envy your talent. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
This is smooth and polished. the flow is perfect and the rhyme is incredible in this piece. you really did a wonderful job, definetely a poem for my library. i also really like your critique message, robert frost is my favorite poet ever beautiful writing, keep posting all your work.Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Heh, thanks tons guys. Much love! Mua!~Carly "Your joy is your sorrow unmasked. And the self-same well from which your laughter rises was often-times filled with your tears." ~Kahil Gibran |
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ScarletPoetess Junior Member
since 2001-05-09
Posts 18 |
Wow! This is so powerful! The rhyme is awesome, and the flow is perfect. This poem rocks! I can't wait to read more. Scarlet |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Before I say something, I'd like to know what the frost symbolizes? Thanks "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Awww BB if I tell everyone, then I won't have that air of mystery, will I? "I'll take in anyone who's taking off their camouflage..." ~Third Eye Blind~Camouflage |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
so, what is it? "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
"I scrutinize and theorise" wonderful, absoloutely wonderful... great job Carly this is amazing Zu " The tree of liberty must be refreshed from time to time with the blood of patriots" -Thomas jefferson |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Now that I know exactly what it represents, I does make more sense. This is truly outstanding. ~*stands up and applauds*~ "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
bumping it for others to read "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Even when you write short pieces you kick ass, Carly! The entire piece runs so smoothly. Just wonderful. ~AF~ Stupidity killed the cat. Curiosity was framed. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Um..helps if I actually hit the button...  Stupidity killed the cat. Curiosity was framed. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Amazing carly!!!! Amazing....wow  SImply wonderful! i really really enjoyed this poem!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
This is incredible! Your work is at such an amazing level. Keep it up. And i love the Frost, as you know. "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very very nice as always Carly. San, the wise |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Absolutely Beautiful work, Carly. This is definitely a fine show of your talent. It's very powerful despite the length. This one's going back up to page 1 where it belongs Nice work.--Marie "You're the girl of my nightmares. |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Wow! I loved the flow of this!  Amazing job Carly! |
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