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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
you say you care but do you really? when were you there in the hard times? you say youll always be by my side but will you really? when were you there when i needed you? you say youll always be there for me but will you really? where are you? i need you now you say youll always love me but will you really? where is your love? i dont feel it you say you are with me but are you really? i dont feel you i dont feel you “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
Awwwww...If you cant believe what someone who cares about you says, then there's probably a problem with them. So sorry, but nevertheless this is a good poem.  ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I had dreams of my best friend last night...this poem went right to my heart....I miss my friend very much.....Tiffy girl, I love this one (library) SEA |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
I like this piece, you put a lot of yourself into your writing which is what makes it such beautiful poetry. i hope everything is ok, email me if you ever need to talk keep writing wonderful poetry.Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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5_sweet_kisses Junior Member
since 2001-04-20
Posts 49 |
great poem hun... keep up the good work!! *licks tiff* |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, Great job, I too hope everything is okay. This is really good until your next poem-- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
lotsa raw emotion is what makes good poetry good poetry..and there is lotsa emotion in this one *KiMMiE* |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I like this one.... I think it read almost like a song, one of those creepy dark songs that we all love so much where I don't feel you is whispered. Neat job, thanks for the thought. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I like this a lot. Don't we all go thru all that hardtimes that comes with the dating game  Hope things do get better for ya. Keep sharing"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very well done. I liked it and yea....been through this  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i like the emotions in this poem...good job...and keep writing...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
There is so much emotion in this piece. And bonus, you're lyrical, very songish. I really like the flow here--great work. "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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