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CwboyAtHeart
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA

0 posted 2001-05-07 11:38 PM

This poem I wrote about a girl that I have loved for about 3 years... She's known it since the beginning. We went to a concert where I realized that I do still have feelings for her, but we're better off as friends. Let me know what you think of this one, thanks ya'll!

THAT PLACE IN MY HEART

I spent so much time
Dreaming about you
And so much time trying
To live without you

I tried so hard
To help you to realize
My feelings about you
I did not disguise

We laughed so much
At all the stupid things
I wanted to fly away with you
I just needed some wings

We've become so close
Even with a strange start
I realized that I would never get
That place in your heart

I'm so glad we've become
Such good of friends
We're always there for eachother
I hope this never ends

I loved you when we first met
But now I think I'll live
Being just friends I know
There's so much love to still give

You held my heart
For quite a while
But I felt that love was
A bit out of your style

I'll never lose that place
That's kept open for you
If you ever decide I'm more than a friend
And maybe you'll love me too

- Cody -

Living From Memories
Living From Thoughts
There Are Some Things In Live
That Cannot Be Taught

Low Man's Lyric
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since 2001-04-03

Posts 236
In a dream

1 posted 2001-05-07 11:44 PM

Awesome poem my friend, I can almost relate to this poem except that I am not good friends with this girl that I liked for 2 years now, we don't hate each other but we arn't friends either. Anyways thank you for this poem that made me remember old memories.

Give her two red roses, each with a note. The first note says "For the woman I love" and the second, "For my best friend."
~Anonymous

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

2 posted 2001-05-07 11:51 PM

I really like this one, Cody!  These lines especially -
"I wanted to fly away with you
I just needed some wings"
Very powerful symbolism here.  I really felt that one.
I think the last line should begin with "then" instead of "and."
Other than that, good job man.

~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

3 posted 2001-05-08 02:50 AM

cody..i really liked this poem and how you discribed and protrayed your feelings in here...great job and i enjoyed this quite a bit...keep writing...

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

vixengrl04
Member

since 2001-04-26

Posts 495
East Haddam, CT

4 posted 2001-05-08 12:23 PM

Awwww this is so sweet!! I wish you luck with this friend of yours, and maybe you should show this to them?? I know if a guy ever wrote a poem like this one for me I would just melt!

It's really good. I like it alot.

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

Pixie-Babe03
Member

since 2000-08-29

Posts 387
Central Maine

5 posted 2001-05-08 02:24 PM

aww! this poem is so sweet

it really touched me, it is so pure and beautiful! i hope to see more of your work in the near future

*Justine*

-=Love starts with a SMILE, grows with a KISS, and ends with a TEAR=-

lonely*soul
Member

since 2001-04-05

Posts 396
east haddam (moodus) ct :)

6 posted 2001-05-08 07:24 PM

this is the first one ive read by you..but now that ive read this..ill be looking for more of your stuff!! i know if you gavet his to me...id melt..like butter (hehe)
*KiMMiE*

420timebong
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since 2001-04-24

Posts 3
Canada

7 posted 2001-05-08 07:37 PM

sweet poem. yeah, its really hard to just be friends with someone that u like alot. i know the feeling. but i guess not everyone was meant to be together.

''The words you say never seem to live up to the ones inside your head.'' Chris Cornell

Lovely_Kris
Member

since 2000-07-11

Posts 176

8 posted 2001-05-08 08:11 PM

Wow this is so good I really enjoyed reading it. Keep up the great work. I hope to read more.
Lovely_Kris

ScarletPoetess
Junior Member

since 2001-05-09

Posts 18

9 posted 2001-05-09 10:18 AM

This is so sweet! I really liked this. Nice piece, and good job.

I hurt myself today, to see if I still feel. I focus on the pain, the only thing that's real.

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

10 posted 2001-05-10 09:50 PM

Very nice job here!! Remember...whatever is meant to be will happen

Just be patient and let fate do its thang hehe

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

11 posted 2001-05-13 04:04 PM

That was a really good poem. For some reason when I was reading it, I was humming it as a country song too

Thanks for sharing and hope to see more of your work

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Heavens Tears

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since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

12 posted 2001-05-13 04:12 PM

This one was very sweet. Keep it up!

*~*Amanda*~*

My tears roll right down my cheeks, but they all soak into my pillow. I feel kinda sorry for it...

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

13 posted 2001-05-17 02:17 AM

Cody! Well done!
I really liked this one. Hope to read more!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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