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Jenn Cirrincione

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0 posted 2001-05-09 07:30 PM

You think I'm aloof,
Feelings scattered,
That I don't feel it...
But I do.

Believe me to be,
Cold-hearted and distant,
As nurturing as a post,
Disconnected and flaky.

Think I do not need,
All that you can give,
That I do not yearn for it...
But I do.

As I await,
Two roads to choose,
Will I forget?
Will I try harder?

Now what you say, do I understand?
Comprehend this cannot be,
Think I do not realize truth,
But I do.

[This message has been edited by Jenn Cirrincione (edited 05-09-2001).]

SEA

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with you

1 posted 2001-05-09 07:33 PM

very well done!

Lakewalker
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2 posted 2001-05-09 07:50 PM

I read this a couple of times and I like it.

"Now what you say, do I understand?
Comprehend this cannot be,
Think I do not realize truth,
But I do."

I like how you ordered the words in this poem, great work jenn

"Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato.

Acies

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3 posted 2001-05-09 09:09 PM

Jen, this is really good
I love the style you used in writing it
awesome write
I love it

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

lonely*soul
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4 posted 2001-05-09 09:12 PM

good job hun..i liked this

*KiMMiE*

Allan Riverwood

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5 posted 2001-05-09 09:32 PM

Nice work Jenn! Maybe if you'd stop talking once and awhile I might be willing to believe you are aloof....

~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

IsGona
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6 posted 2001-05-09 09:35 PM

Lakes fav is my fav... All the odd number stanzas I really loved. But hey the whole thing is good.

anonymous albert ?

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7 posted 2001-05-10 03:37 AM

"Think I do not need,
All that you can give,
That I do not yearn for it...
But I do"

you discribed your situation..so well..hope things are better

...cya~ jenn

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

Jenn Cirrincione

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8 posted 2001-05-10 06:08 AM

Thanks for your replies everyone!! And Allan... HAHA I don't talk THAT much...

"I've come too close to happiness, to have it swept away,don't think I can take the pain, never fall again..." Janet

Allysa

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9 posted 2001-05-10 08:14 AM

Jenn, you don't talk NEARLY as much as I do. Allan just doesn't know this, YET. My hand sorta hurts b/c I had blood drawn yesterday and the veins in my arms weren't working. ANyways, AWESOME

poem. You ordered the words around to make them fit what you wanted to say very well. C-ya>!

I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to. I never thought that I couldn't.
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banburycross
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viginia

10 posted 2001-05-10 12:43 PM

the repition in every other stanza worked well in this piece, i think you did a great job on this. always like reading your work, keep psoting

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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11 posted 2001-05-15 03:08 PM

Well done on this one Jenn! I enjoyed it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Jenn Cirrincione

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12 posted 2001-05-15 05:31 PM

Thanks Dopey!

Welcome back!!

"If it's wrong to love you, then my heart just won't let me be right, cause I'm drowned in you, and I won't pull through without you by my side." Mari

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