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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl 
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You think I'm aloof, Feelings scattered, That I don't feel it... But I do. Believe me to be, Cold-hearted and distant, As nurturing as a post, Disconnected and flaky. Think I do not need, All that you can give, That I do not yearn for it... But I do. As I await, Two roads to choose, Will I forget? Will I try harder? Now what you say, do I understand? Comprehend this cannot be, Think I do not realize truth, But I do. [This message has been edited by Jenn Cirrincione (edited 05-09-2001).] |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
very well done!  |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I read this a couple of times and I like it. "Now what you say, do I understand? Comprehend this cannot be, Think I do not realize truth, But I do." I like how you ordered the words in this poem, great work jenn "Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Jen, this is really good I love the style you used in writing it awesome write I love it "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
good job hun..i liked this *KiMMiE* |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Nice work Jenn! Maybe if you'd stop talking once and awhile I might be willing to believe you are aloof....   ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Lakes fav is my fav... All the odd number stanzas I really loved. But hey the whole thing is good. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
"Think I do not need, All that you can give, That I do not yearn for it... But I do" you discribed your situation..so well..hope things are better  ...cya~ jennif i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Thanks for your replies everyone!! And Allan... HAHA I don't talk THAT much... "I've come too close to happiness, to have it swept away,don't think I can take the pain, never fall again..." Janet |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Jenn, you don't talk NEARLY as much as I do. Allan just doesn't know this, YET. My hand sorta hurts b/c I had blood drawn yesterday and the veins in my arms weren't working. ANyways, AWESOME  poem. You ordered the words around to make them fit what you wanted to say very well. C-ya>!I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to. I never thought that I couldn't. |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
the repition in every other stanza worked well in this piece, i think you did a great job on this. always like reading your work, keep psoting Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done on this one Jenn! I enjoyed it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Thanks Dopey! Welcome back!!"If it's wrong to love you, then my heart just won't let me be right, cause I'm drowned in you, and I won't pull through without you by my side." Mari |
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