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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
this road is straight and narrow with hardly any curves i take it every day it never seems to change today i missed the turn that took me to this road i veered off the straight and narrow and ran into some curves i lost my way on this road i didnt know what to expect i almost lost control but i finally got it back i found i like this road i found i like the curves i found that straight and narrow wasnt all the best now i take this different road and others everyday the ones with turns and curves that always seem to change “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” U in the dark u in the pain u on the run Living a hell living ur ghost living ur hell [This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (edited 05-08-2001).] |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
go tiff!! awsome meaning to it al, very good. i liked it alot  *KiM* |
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Godsend_1 Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 247great state of illinois |
i saw the greatest curves i ever saw the other day..........wait a minute i think i am thinking about the wrong kinda curves *shushes and runs away super fast* anywho good poem hun i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be......so deal with it |
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JBaker515
since 2001-02-28
Posts 458Dartmouth College |
ANOTHER WINNER!! LOVED IT!! $ Jeff $ : ) |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
LOL@Ben. You better be talkin' bout her photo, man.  Tiff, nice job on the poem, but I think the repitition was a bit disorganized. You kinda spread it out all over the place, when you could have made a neat little repetition scheme. Just my personal opinion. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
the image of a road is often used to create metaphors, and i thought you did a good job with the way you potrayed this. i like this piece, you did an excellent job on this. keep posting all your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
Kinda reminded me of "the road less traveled". Not sure if this poem is metaphorical or if it's acutually about a road, but either way, you wrote it well. Good work. ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I like curves too  Well done on the poem.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i really enjoyed the meaning behind this poem...gave me something to think about...that maybe i should switch roads...tahnks for the read tiff...and keep writing...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Glad you found something you like good write Tiff keep em coming "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
pretty spiffy stuff there tiff Oh wait your not who I thougth you were JK good poem, and whats wrong with the straight and narrow lol, and what about these other curves? |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
this reminded me of the Road Less Travelled by robert frost... i loved the concept but in MHO of course, i think this can be even better with a little tightening... nevertheless, i enjoyed the read and i feel an urge to write one about roads myself...  |
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