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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
lol this is the other one from my english project in 10th grade...lol i pulled all of this out of mes ace! lol so dont be worrAyeds that i was abbused or nethings likes that..this one is purdAys 'stupis' toos i think but thats just me. When im done, when im done you want be the light from my sun how could your heart be so empty to make me feel as if i was wimpy. (lol@wimpy) you slapped me across the face my blood in my mouth i can still taste you made me feel so scared how could you have dared. when im done, when im done you want be my life, my only one how could u have said those things to me i felt i had to beg and plea you beat me up many a time you make me feel i was worth less then a dime you make me feel trapped and caged in my life i wanted to start a new page when im done, when im done i will have finally one february 23, 1998 okays same for this one...i like a few lines and ill prollys gank and redos likes all of its. there u gos lol be gentle in critiquin peeze lol tiff “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” U in the dark u in the pain u on the run Living a hell living ur ghost living ur hell [This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (edited 05-06-2001).] |
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JBaker515
since 2001-02-28
Posts 458Dartmouth College |
..interesting... $ Jeff $ : ) |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Nah, I thought it was great. I'm enjoying your older stuff, Tiff.  Are you posting more of it? ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
lol allan thats all of my stuff that u bes lookins ats! those were the first things i ever wrote...and then i just stopped untill wut was it 3-4 weeks ago when i just pickeds it up out of nowheres and started writins. wut i post usually is wut ive written that day. lol thanx for the encouragements thos....loves ya muchs!tiff  “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
well i'm really glad that you started writing again. i also really like reading people's older work, it's fun to see how much people has progressed and i like knowing that pip has such an impact on improving everyone's poetry. keep posting all your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
You have progressed a lot from your 10th grade work. I enjoyed reading this.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
You've been impressing me lately. Awesome girl keep it up "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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