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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
i can offer you nothing more ive given you all thats me now all we have is time and each other ill just have to wait and see but dont expect me to be here forever ive given you all of my heart ill wait for you and your endeavor but first you just have to start hah i dont think thats the real title but o wells ill use it for nows......how bouts..'nothing but time' ? and heys i knows im contradictin meselfes up theres *points* but isnt that the way it gos? “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” U in the dark u in the pain u on the run Living a hell living ur ghost living ur hell [This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (edited 05-06-2001).] |
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JBaker515
since 2001-02-28
Posts 458Dartmouth College |
i liked this poem.. it flowed so nicey!!  $ Jeff $ : ) |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I think the title was fine.  The poem itself was also well written, it flowed well because of the alternating line size. Well done. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
This is one of my favorites by you, it flows really well and i think that it is very well written. keep posting your work Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
ooh ooh i like this one it flowed really good and is just a wonderful poem! great work!*Justine* -=Love starts with a SMILE, grows with a KISS, and ends with a TEAR=- |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Tick tock...broke the clock la di da....ha ha ha...ya ya ya..na na na.. well done on this one.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
acutally, I like your title!! it's really cool..I wish I had the talent you do!! keep it up!! Stace |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
stace *grrrrrs* u writes just as good as i do u dodo *smax* u no talk bad bout urself or ill beat u up ...got it!!!!? thankies everybody  lol *hugs*tiff  “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
nicely done Tiff, not bad at all. If this is a product of your writer's block, I say you're doing an excellent job considering "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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