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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
what makes me an outcast? what separates me from you? why am i so different? what did i do? is there a real reason that you wont associate with me? or is it just because your too shallow to see look a little harder inside of me you may find somthing you like or even someone youd like to be theres nothing too bad about me nothing worse than you tell me what ive got to do in order to please you wear the trendy clothes you wear? and follow like the rest? what do i have to do to be good as the best what should i do to make you understand im cool too? what do i have to do? to atleast please you? its not worth it at all your not sumone i want to be your just someone i thought was worth the envy |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
Hey, its in to be out! Trust me, forget the social pecking order. If someone can't see past a sterotype, odds are YOU won't want to associate with THEM. Just like mister rodgers says, "the inside is what matters." :::::::Cool poem::::::: Spreading insanity, one post at a time |
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JBaker515
since 2001-02-28
Posts 458Dartmouth College |
I LIKED THE POEM!! GREAT WORK HERE!  $ Jeff $ : ) |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
such truthful question such well discribed words of your feelings i liked it lots...great job and keep posting these great pieces kim...   ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
I liked this... Most "out" people have more to say that makes more sense than the in people...*thinks from that sentence people are going to get the wrong idea...* Great poem. ~First they tell you, you can’t sleep alone in a strange place, then they tell you, you can’t sleep with somebody else~ |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
I really liked the thoughts that you put into this one, you did a great job on it. keep posting all your work Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I really like the last stanza a lot. The completing thought is so powerful and condescending towards the opposite party, I am absolutely in love with it.  Oh but I must comment on the flow of the poem, it may have worked a lot better had you spent more time on the syllable scheme. It helps to have a scheme of syllable to speed up the reading of the poem. All in all, great job! This poem left an impression on me. Oh and it's not necessarily in to be out, but it IS in to be your own person. And if you're an "in" person, then c'est la vie. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Great job....you said a lot of good things in this poem, but I don't think you need to be envying anybody....yer fine the way you are.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Are you trying to join a clique? The people who dont see you as the person you are don't deserve your attention. Be with real friends, they'll appreciate you for who you truly are "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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