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sleepymoongirl Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 157bc canada |
(hey u guyz this stuff is new yet all alot of stufferz like this hope u guyz likes them) You seem to want to know me Yet you alwayz close me out Like You can't trust anyone The world is out to get you There is no where to hide But you have your many masks to hide behind Getting lost in your dimension of lies What is the truth? you say why not trust others Yet in your dark hearts Your still waiting for the world to screw you over Afraid to let me in why? Are you afraid I won't understand? I've faced enough shock disapointment sorrow, anger Too much for such a short time I am the listener But I will let my voice ring to help others I will be there to listen with an open mind If you would only give me a chance We all have story to tell So sit awhile with me my friend And tell me yours as u go in life there will be ur hardships it is up to u if it makes u or breaks u. |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
good grief scarlet! i love this! There is no where to hide But you have your many masks to hide behind Getting lost in your dimension of lies ^ i loved that parts *points* but the ending ..its blew me minds aways! I am the listener But I will let my voice ring to help others I will be there to listen with an open mind If you would only give me a chance We all have story to tell So sit awhile with me my friend And tell me yours WOWthat was simply amazing! addin to me library hunnAys  tiff  “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” U in the dark u in the pain u on the run Living a hell living ur ghost living ur hell [This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (edited 05-06-2001).] |
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JBaker515
since 2001-02-28
Posts 458Dartmouth College |
NICENESS!! I enjoyed this one!! ~ Jeff ~ :) |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
Yes, the world be a confuzzling place. Excellant poem. I am blinded by its excellence. in fact, the excellentness of it is shockingly excellent. ------------------------------- Life's short, get your kicks in! Spreading insanity, one post at a time |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
great poem.. i really enjoyed this poem.. "We all have story to tell So sit awhile with me my friend And tell me yours" this part was meaningful to me.. very good job on the poem and keep writing  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
This is the best that I have read from you Scarlet, quite simply. It left me in awe... just... wow.  Amazing work. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Godsend_1 Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 247great state of illinois |
*walks slowly over to scarlet, and sits in his giant chair* *scarlet sits with him* *he puts his arm around scarlet, and gives her a hug* i love you scarlet this poem was amazing i really liked it you have a lot of talent hun *gives scarlet a kiss on the cheek* keep it up love you rock the world i live on cuz you be such an awesome friend bye ben redshaw the loved i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be......so deal with it |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Nice work, Scarlet! I enjoyed this quite a bit. Keep sharing your work. Nice job. --Marie Don't ever be someone's slogan, because you are poetry. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done on the poem....very enjoyable.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
Whoa, never before has anyone captured my view of the world so completely as you have here. Not even me. This was great in general and for personal reasons. "It's too cold in the world...too cold to be alone..." - >¶Øʆ< |
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