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a broken wing
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a broken wing |
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broken wing Junior Member
since 2001-04-30
Posts 37 |
A broken wing but not a broken soul To this heart I shall bring healing for nonother than that is my goal My spirit was chrushed and trampled upon I was hurt, stepped on, my heart was broken Until my Me had just withdrawn My uttered words just became unspoken But all that was once upon a time ago and my broken wing has begun to mend My heart is shinning again with a glow and my affections I shall no longer pretend ~not complete~ "The sun in your eyes made some of the lies worth believing." |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this poem. I thought it sounded great. I hope to see it when it is complete. Hope to see you post more in the future! I enjoy your work!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Very nice! I can't wait to see the completed product. --Marie Don't ever be someone's slogan, because you are poetry. |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
I really liked the sound of this. I hope to see it when it's completed (like that's not been said before  )"Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \ |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Like an idiot I had thought before reading the replies that the poem was signed "not complete" because that was the alleged name of the author. Shows how aware I am...  Share with us the completed product and I'll give my completed thoughts. Make sense? ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Can't wait to see the completion of this poem "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
the flow was very nice...i hope to see the end of this poem soon...great job...keep writing...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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