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MoeRocko
Member

since 2001-04-25

Posts 166
West Virginia

0 posted 2001-05-05 08:51 PM

In the midnight air
I could swear you were there
In the dead silence
I felt you there
When I feel you like this
It's just not fair

When I feel you in the midnight air
I know how much you care
I wish this feeling, I could share
You make me love
The Midnight Air

Don't turn your back on the future, you have nothing to look back on.....

knightlyshadows
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 791
obscured vision

1 posted 2001-05-05 08:53 PM

awws i likes ewoksters! *hugs

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

U in the dark u in the pain u on the run
Living a hell living ur ghost living ur hell

[This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (edited 05-05-2001).]

Suga_Baby
Member

since 2000-08-06

Posts 380
Maine, USA

2 posted 2001-05-05 09:08 PM

Oh this is so cute!!

Very nice work!! Yay!

"A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep."

lonely*soul
Member

since 2001-04-05

Posts 396
east haddam (moodus) ct :)

3 posted 2001-05-05 11:44 PM

i like this lots..very cute..and gave me shivers...mysterious ya know?
*kimmie*

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-05-06 03:16 AM

This was great. I really liked the way you expressed this one. Well done!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

5 posted 2001-05-06 12:50 PM

This was a great poem, Moe! I really liked the way you used the same rhyme throughout the whole poem. That's a hard thing to do, but you did it very nicely. Good work!

--Marie

Don't ever be someone's slogan, because you are poetry.

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

6 posted 2001-05-06 01:01 PM

i also noticed the rym that you have blend in this poem..i thought that was a great idea and worked very well..for the poem..i enjoyed the read..keep writing

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

7 posted 2001-05-06 05:13 PM

It also sometimes comes off very cheesily, but I like how you had discretion enough to add a few non-rhyming lines in. That really broke it up accurately enough to keep it from growing too old too fast.

~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

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