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Poet on Acid
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0 posted 2001-05-06 12:09 PM


I personally don't think it's one of my best for the simple fact there is no blood and no one is crying but you know for a love poem I guess it's ok. Enjoy.

I can feel you
all the time that I'm awake
I'm in love with you
it's my heart you chose to take

I can still taste your lips
and still see your eyes
I remember your hips
and the curve of your thighs

I still smell you
and feel your skin
the moments we have are too few
when we're apart it feels like a sin

I still feel your tongue against mine
and remember holding you
all I got to say is damn your fine
and I'll always be in love with you

"It's too cold in the world...too cold to be alone..." - >¶Øʆ<

© Copyright 2001 Tony Ryan Johnson - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-05-06 02:56 AM


I enjoyed the poem.......wow....a love poem by you. Very well received.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

AngelShell
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2 posted 2001-05-06 05:03 AM


I liked this, I thought it was brilliant.  

~First they tell you, you can’t sleep alone in a strange place, then they tell you, you can’t sleep with somebody else~

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3 posted 2001-05-06 12:54 PM


Good job, POA.  It's always nice to try different things.     I think this is the first love poem I've read from you.. heh.  Nice work, I enjoyed the read.

--Marie

Don't ever be someone's slogan, because you are poetry.

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4 posted 2001-05-06 12:58 PM


i cant believe you wrote a love poem..
and a very good love poem..it turned out..
i liked it..keep writing..

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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5 posted 2001-05-06 05:09 PM


Good job man, the descriptions here were very admirable.  Rhyme scheme was very well selected and didn't hinder it in the least.  
Nice work.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

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