Teen Poetry #4 |
Promises |
Angel Bee Member
since 2001-01-30
Posts 176Virginia |
I promise I won't forget the day we met sitting together as the sun set I promise I won't forget the first time we kissed or all the moments together we could have missed I promise I won't forget always to be your friend I'll be sitting here beside you to the end I promise never to try not to make you too mad but you need to promise never to make too sad I promise never to leave you hanging alone in my heart, love's seed you have sown The sky may fall, and the stars may too but I promise I will always love you *~Sometimes just holding hands is holding on to everything.~* |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
wow...cutish...i like it lots!! you love him..you want to kiss him lol good job *KiM* |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I really really like the format reversal in the last two lines, how you made the last one the promise. That gave the ending such an impact. I thought that was genius. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
This is AWESOME! I love it love it love it! nice job! "A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep." |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done on the poem. It was really sweet. I enjoyed it. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Aww.. this is very well written. The flow is very nice, and the structure of the lines was well done. Nice work! --Marie Don't ever be someone's slogan, because you are poetry. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
this was a very sweet piece and i think yous hould give this to who you wrote it for..its touching..i liekd it...and the repitition worked very well..keep writing ...? if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I'd like for someone to write me something like this this was really sweet Angel Bee keep sharing my friend "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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