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Would It Be So Hard?
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Would It Be So Hard? |
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The Lost Supertone Member
since 2001-01-20
Posts 74Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada |
I just wrote this poem today, I figured I might as well start writeing newer stuff if I intend to continue posting for more than a week. haha So this one I kinda wanted to write for a while. It's more like most of my poems, it has a similar thought through out, and a stanza at the end that differs and makes the other ones make more sence. If you read one of my other ones "A Rose By Any Other Name" then you will recognise the similaritys between the two. This is probably my most uniformed style. I hope you enjoy... ____________________________________ Would it be so hard? To show up, and support me? To tell me I did a good job? To say that I amazed you? Would it be so hard? To put up with a bad joke? To fain and interest? To not walk away? Would it be so hard? To do my work? To fix something that I broke? To not look down on me? Would it be so hard? To listen when I hurt? To try and help? To pick me up when I fall down? Would it be so hard? To at least thank me when I do these for you? ___________________________________ OH and encase you wondering, this poem is more dirrected to my family than anyone else |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nice one here........I liked it. QUestions that should be answer but probably won't unless you're holding a pitch fork. Nice.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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The Lost Supertone Member
since 2001-01-20
Posts 74Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada |
NOW WHO WANTS TO AWNSER MY QUESTIONS! [This message has been edited by acire (edited 01-22-2001).] |
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The Lost Supertone Member
since 2001-01-20
Posts 74Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada |
OK well either my reply killed it, or the poem wasn't that good... oh well... I can get over having a bad poem... wait is this what we do when we dont' likea poem? Just not reply? hmmm ok well I can do that... yeah... that's it... be really reserved... yup I can do that... wait... can I? hmmm lemmes ee... |
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The Lost Supertone Member
since 2001-01-20
Posts 74Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada |
Wow Ok I guess this must be a really bad poem. Maybe I should start mocking it... nah... then I'd just be ridiculeing my work to make it seems like it means less to me than it does and hence would be lieing to everyone includeing myself... so I guess I'll just wak away and see if I ever get anohter reply. |
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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
its incredible. youve managed to be a junior member technically by answering your own questions. haha. good poem supertone. bear with us for were slow when it comes to replying. San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Some tough questions here, questions that a lot of us ask...exellent writing here, and don't get so discouraged when people don't reply quickly...we're somewhat slow sometimes. Keep your chin up, because you're a good poet!  *Krista Knutson* I'm a slow dying flower In a frost-killing hour The sweet turning sour and untouchable... -Natalie Merchant |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Chin up my child! A family isn't always there, trust me I know. But, I can tell you who is always there....you and your trusty pen and paper. oh and me. I think that too often, we get shorted when we give our all only to get less than in return. A lesson hard learned, but definitely something to think about. So just think about it before you sacrifice so much. Best of luck my friend...a wonderful write. ~*~Jessica~*~ *Being an angel doesn't mean having a halo or wings, it means doing the right thing and wanting to make a difference* |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
do what I usually do, post befire bed.. then when you come home from school.. walllah! anyways... nice ideas coming to query... I enjoyed your focus on how your not accepting what is happening.. great job bro! keep writing... ~JDR "Is it love in my gut, or piss in my bladder?" -Allan Riverwood |
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The Lost Supertone Member
since 2001-01-20
Posts 74Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada |
YESS I ACCTUALLY GOT REPLYS! YEY FOR ME! WOOO HOO! I RULE! (The Lost Supertone begins to get really proud and is then struck with a bolt of lightning for unexplained reasons) |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Wow I read 2 poems by u today... both of them FULL of qustions. I think that is great. Nice work.... Sorry that can't answer them for ya. ~Jason "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Dave, it doesn't count when half of them are yours. ~_^ |
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The Lost Supertone Member
since 2001-01-20
Posts 74Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada |
Thank you, most of my poems tend to be in question form. Sometimes I awnser them at the end. but sometimes I leave the awnser up to my reader to think if there is anyone in their life who they make feel like me. Most of what I write is for me and my reader to learn and become more wise in doing so |
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The Lost Supertone Member
since 2001-01-20
Posts 74Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada |
pffffffffff Allen, SOMONE is suposed to be sleeping, that's why he went off AIM, don't I just feel like someone dosn't wanna talk to me... I write out some of my big ideas, and you COULD tlak to me about em and we might acctually have an interesting conversation that you won't decide I'm auto wrong about and you go off AIM, shesh! |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
see what i mean? i post once, you post twice. you should exceed my post # within the night. |
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The Lost Supertone Member
since 2001-01-20
Posts 74Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada |
Probably tis the power of the iMac man! haha Man I am saying Man more online than I do in real life... soon I'll be saying dude Hey dude did you... AHHHHHHHHHH! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
questions in life? Doesn't it become harder if the answers are actually no where to be found? This is a great post Supertone thanks for the read keep sharing I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Good poem. Sometimes only you can be there for YOU. However what is with the edits...? I think everyone's gone mad 'round here! xoxo Jenn "A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ?? |
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