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Smlie4u87
Junior Member

since 2001-04-28

Posts 16

0 posted 2001-05-05 04:38 PM

Hey everyone I wrote this poem about how i felt when my friend said something the beark my heart, and after she said it I was crying in my math and skills class. Well tell me what you think of it.
Thankz,
   Tracy

The rose
The roes was alive
When I give it to you
But now
You have killed it.
Why did you have
to kill the most important
friendship of my life?
The roes was the friendship
we had.
But you have killed the roes
that was keeping us together.
Why did you have to kill it?
The words you said to me
just has killed me.
Why did you?
Those words you said
just made me cry.
Did you just want to see
me cry, is that why?
I thought you were someone
who I could always talk
to about anything.
Someone who is always
here for me.
But you just didn’t want
to hear the reason why.
When you were one of
the people who asked  why.
You were like a sister to me
but words you have said
just really hurt me.
It beak my heart.
That was the reason
why I was crying after
you said those words.
Let me ask you something,
did you know that what you
said  made me cry,
did you know that?

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

1 posted 2001-05-05 05:25 PM

Hmm... this is quite an emotional poem. I hope you showed it to her by now.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

Smlie4u87
Junior Member

since 2001-04-28

Posts 16

2 posted 2001-05-05 10:03 PM

Umm I just wrote this poem today, and do you think I should show it her?

Dopey Dope

Moderator

Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-05-06 02:52 AM

naaa i don't think you should show it to her. I think you should talk to her about it in a rash, and mature way.
Well done on the poem.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

4 posted 2001-05-07 10:55 PM

Tracy, one big ouch for you. Definitely do not show it to her because it may do more damage than good.

Anyway, nice expression and I hope you get through it.

~AF~

Stupidity killed the cat. Curiosity was framed.
~ Unknown ~

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