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Deranger
Member

since 2000-05-10

Posts 498
Somewhere, between here and there

0 posted 2001-04-19 01:03 AM

Before me you stand, pale and bearing empty hands-
White cloth spread across the table, I lay you down
Fair yellow hair, all tangled in your thorny crown
Surrounded softly in candlelight, I stood there all night,
Watching you sleep, deeply dreaming of better tomorrows
Sleep now, let slumber carry away your sorrows

I woke upon the dawn, and the ‘morrow sang a sour song
In my ears rang all my fears brought to life; so long-
My angel of the operating room…Goodbye my angel of the operating room
Hello my friend, gloom.

Spreading insanity, one post at a time

My skull has glowing green eyes

lonely*soul
Member

since 2001-04-05

Posts 396
east haddam (moodus) ct :)

1 posted 2001-04-19 08:18 AM

wow at first i thought this was gonna be a lil romeo and juilet action...kinda is!! neways i like this one alot
<3 *~KiMmIe*

" im surrounded by people, but yet im still all alone"

Heavens Tears

Senior Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

2 posted 2001-04-19 09:04 AM

Interesting poem. It was differetn, but I still liked it.

*If the only place I can live my dreams is in my sleep, then I'll sleep forever!*

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

3 posted 2001-04-19 09:32 AM

This is very interesting.. it really made me sit back and really think about it.. even read it a few times over again. I really liked the ending.. very different.
Nice job! I enjoyed the read.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-04-19 02:32 PM

This was great man! I really enjoyed this poem. You are very talented! Hope to read more.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Deranger
Member

since 2000-05-10

Posts 498
Somewhere, between here and there

5 posted 2001-04-19 06:18 PM

Thanks and more thanks. I'm just glad my humble poetry is of enjoyment to others...lala...MOOO!

Spreading insanity, one post at a time

My skull has glowing green eyes!

Child of the Stars

Senior Member

since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

6 posted 2001-04-19 09:51 PM

MOOoooOOOOooOOO yourself! This was very good buddy........very good indeed........
~Carly

There is pleasure in poetic pains which only poets know......~Unknown

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

7 posted 2001-05-07 09:05 PM

You have written this really well my friend.
I'm very impressed.
I hope to see more of your work
I'll be waiting for them

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

8 posted 2001-05-07 11:13 PM

Not bad at all! I like the idea "angel on the operating table." Very sad.
Great work though.

~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

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