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Hacas
Junior Member

since 2001-05-05

Posts 25

0 posted 2001-05-05 03:43 PM

The winds were yelling, the waves were swelling,
The sky was black and drear,
When the crew with eyes of flame brought the ship without a name
Alongside the last Buccaneer.

"Whence flies your sloop full sail before so fierce a gale,
When all others drive bare on the seas?
Say, come ye from the shore of the holy Salvador,
Or the gulf of the rich Caribbees?"

"From a shore no search hath found, from a gulf no line can sound,
Without rudder or needle we steer;
Above, below, our bark, dies the sea fowl and the shark,
As we fly by the last Buccaneer.

"To-night there shall be heard on the rocks of Cape de Verde
A loud crash, and a louder roar;
And to-morrow shall the deep, with a heavy moaning, sweep
The corpses and wreck to the shore."

The stately ship of Clyde securely now may ride
In the breath of the citron shades;
And Severn's towering mast securely now flies fast,
Through the sea of the balmy Trades.

From St. Jago's wealthy port, from Havannah's royal fort,
The seaman goes forth without fear;
For since that stormy night not a mortal hath had sight
Of the flag of the last Buccaneer.

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

1 posted 2001-05-05 03:57 PM

Nice! Very very nice, in fact. I like the organization of stanzas in this one, how each had an internal rhyme to every other line. Very clever!
The theme is also original, I like that... it tells a story, and an involving one at that. It had drawn me completely in.
Wonderful work!
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

Hacas
Junior Member

since 2001-05-05

Posts 25

2 posted 2001-05-05 04:10 PM

Thanks Allan I'm glad you like it.

lonely*soul
Member

since 2001-04-05

Posts 396
east haddam (moodus) ct :)

3 posted 2001-05-05 04:15 PM

i love the idea of having stories like that in poems hehe...b.c alotta ppl write poems with feelings..but this was good. i liked it

*KiM*

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-05-06 01:43 AM

Hey this was outstanding!!!!!! Wowish....very well done on the poem! I completely enjoyed it! Hope to see more.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

5 posted 2001-05-06 11:41 AM

I REALLY enjoyed this poem, Hacas! Very nicely done! The language you used worked very well, and gave the poem a really good feel. Wow.. nice work!

--Marie

Don't ever be someone's slogan, because you are poetry.

banburycross
Senior Member

since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

6 posted 2001-05-06 04:11 PM

the wording was very clever and creative in this and the mood of the poem was a lot of fun. i liked this piece, keep posting your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Hacas
Junior Member

since 2001-05-05

Posts 25

7 posted 2001-05-07 08:56 PM

I'm glad y'all like it!

"Fight for what you believe in"
"Stay yourself no matter what people say"

[This message has been edited by Hacas (edited 05-07-2001).]

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