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TearsOfPearls
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since 1999-09-23

Posts 322
Vereeniging, South-Africa

0 posted 2001-05-05 11:23 AM

The sky cries
one lonely tear,
one lonely tear
for one lonely fear,
one lonely fear
of dying dreams
never was part
of my true means.

The sky cries
one lonely tear,
gave it to me
and I kept it near,
reminds me that
dreams die on
not in this world
but in hearts of stone.

The sky cries
one lonely tear,
one lonely tear
for a heart so clear,
so untouched
by the human hate,
it won't understand
when it meets it's fate.

The sky cries
one lonely fear
for dreams killed
by one lonely fear.

Planning big can be a gamble...I have already rolled the dice!

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

1 posted 2001-05-05 11:29 AM

I really enjoyed this poem a great deal, no word of a lie. It sounded and read through just wonderfully, the way the lines were organized was top-notch. This is a true masterpiece that I am adding to my personal library.
It's wonderful to see you posting again.

Hope you stick around.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

2 posted 2001-05-05 11:30 AM

hit the button Allan.....

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

3 posted 2001-05-05 03:12 PM

awesome writing..i really enjoyed this one..
even though its my first poem..i'm reading from you..hehe anyways..i liked it much..you expressec what you were trying say so well..keep writing

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

JBaker515

Member

since 2001-02-28

Posts 458
Dartmouth College

4 posted 2001-05-05 03:22 PM

AWESOME..this poem flowed so beautifully, i love it..GREAT JOB!!!!!!
Jeff

lonely*soul
Member

since 2001-04-05

Posts 396
east haddam (moodus) ct :)

5 posted 2001-05-05 04:26 PM

i think we have another devine poet in our presence...yaya!! i really liked this one..keeps writing and i hope to see more of your work soon
*KiM*

Hacas
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since 2001-05-05

Posts 25

6 posted 2001-05-05 04:31 PM

Great poem...WOW!

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

7 posted 2001-05-06 01:45 AM

This was very well done. I liked the poem very much. It rang like a song, but sounded great!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

TearsOfPearls
Member

since 1999-09-23

Posts 322
Vereeniging, South-Africa

8 posted 2001-05-06 08:41 AM

Thanks Allan, and to the rest of you, I'm glad to be posting again

Planning big can be a gamble...I have already rolled the dice!

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

9 posted 2001-05-07 11:02 PM

This is fantastic! It read more like a chant to me than a poem and that sure as hell gets two big thumbs up.

I really, really, really like it. This is heading into the library.

~AF~

Stupidity killed the cat. Curiosity was framed.
~ Unknown ~

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

10 posted 2001-05-10 09:45 AM

WOW!!! I am amazed by the way this poem is written. Most beautiful read my friend. keep sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

vixengrl04
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since 2001-04-26

Posts 495
East Haddam, CT

11 posted 2001-05-10 10:41 AM

This is great. I really like the way that you wrote this. Hope to see more work from you.

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

Suga_Baby
Member

since 2000-08-06

Posts 380
Maine, USA

12 posted 2001-05-10 06:08 PM

WOW! I REALLY like this! It's wonderful!!! Thanx for sharing it

,
Suga

"A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep."

MoeRocko
Member

since 2001-04-25

Posts 166
West Virginia

13 posted 2001-05-10 06:11 PM

Great one ...dreams die on...... stays with me. Powerful

Castles made of sand slip into Sea eventually...

Why do people remind me of vacuums?

EagleScorpion
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since 2000-03-08

Posts 1644
Here, Now, Forever

14 posted 2001-07-03 04:30 PM

This is an outstanding poem from start to finish... outstanding, TearsOfPearls
I've read alot of your poems.. and i havent yet found a happy one.. i dont know if thats "just your poetry style" or if you are really this perpetually depressed.. but either way i wish you great luck on your journey.. and i give you my love
too bad you cant hug people with keyboards..

Love is God. Love is war. Love is what your life is for.

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