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DarkAngelOfTheStars
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0 posted 2001-05-05 09:55 AM


ok this isnt that good but i havent put a poem on here in awhile so i just thought i would put this one up...

You think I forgot
Maybe you think I was too young to remember

I saw the pain in her eyes
And heard the screams in the darkness

She still screams in my mind
I relive the pain

How could I possibly forget?

I had to be courageous
I stood between you and her

And now you stand here in front of me
Demanding respect

How could you ask such a thing?
After all you put us through?

I’m yelling and screaming inside
Look what you did to her
Just leave!

You’re not my father
And you could never be

I hate you
I really do


Dont knock on deaths door ...... ring the bell and run......he hates that

[This message has been edited by DarkAngelOfTheStars (edited 05-05-2001).]

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1 posted 2001-05-05 11:25 AM


Ouch, this is such pure power... I hope you don't show him this poem, nobody deserves to hear this from their own child...
Still, some things have to be said.  
~Allan

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2 posted 2001-05-05 01:16 PM


Wow.. very powerful poem!  The ending was awesome!  I'm sorry that you had to write to this poem.  I hope things get better.
Nicely done.

--Marie

Don't ever be someone's slogan, because you are poetry.

DarkAngelOfTheStars
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3 posted 2001-05-05 01:40 PM


dont worry i wouldnt show my family any of my poems...and cuz im a nice person i dont tell him i hate him either but he really brought on the hate himself so ya know.  and im not sorry i had to write this poem everythings ok.

Dont knock on deaths door ...... ring the bell and run......he hates that

knightlyshadows
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4 posted 2001-05-05 02:53 PM


*hugs* hope everything will be okays hun.
*gives u a red sucker for helpin her out*  
tiff

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

U in the dark u in the pain u on the run
Living a hell living ur ghost living ur hell

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5 posted 2001-05-05 03:26 PM


powerful poem..i liekd it much and totally related to the situation..and i thought you did a very well job on discribing the situation and i wrote some on the same subjects...anyways...cya~kat ...?

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6 posted 2001-05-05 03:49 PM


WOW...is everything with you ok??
It was really powerful..great job..hope it gets better for you..JEFF

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7 posted 2001-05-05 04:10 PM


i didnt get it till the second time around..but neways...i hope your doing ok..smile  
                  *KiM*

DarkAngelOfTheStars
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8 posted 2001-05-05 04:32 PM


yummy!!!! a red sucker! *opens the sucker and eats it*  thank you tiff!!
Thank you albert im glad i know someone that understands me.
and im fine jeff, it happened a long time ago and it really doesnt matter anymore...i just thought i would write about it to get it out of my head! but im all better   and my birthday is in 7 more days!! yay!

see ya!

Dont knock on deaths door ...... ring the bell and run......he hates that

dramaqueen22086
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9 posted 2001-05-05 07:09 PM


hey i thought that was really good. you are a good writter. keep up the good work.
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10 posted 2001-05-06 02:26 AM


This was well done and full of emotion and power. I really enjoyed this but found the situation to be sad. Hope things get better.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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11 posted 2001-05-06 03:04 AM


I liked this.

It was really powerful (I think someone may have already said that)
Good job.

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