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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
ok this isnt that good but i havent put a poem on here in awhile so i just thought i would put this one up... You think I forgot Maybe you think I was too young to remember I saw the pain in her eyes And heard the screams in the darkness She still screams in my mind I relive the pain How could I possibly forget? I had to be courageous I stood between you and her And now you stand here in front of me Demanding respect How could you ask such a thing? After all you put us through? I’m yelling and screaming inside Look what you did to her Just leave! You’re not my father And you could never be I hate you I really do Dont knock on deaths door ...... ring the bell and run......he hates that [This message has been edited by DarkAngelOfTheStars (edited 05-05-2001).] |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Ouch, this is such pure power... I hope you don't show him this poem, nobody deserves to hear this from their own child... Still, some things have to be said. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Wow.. very powerful poem! The ending was awesome! I'm sorry that you had to write to this poem. I hope things get better. Nicely done. --Marie Don't ever be someone's slogan, because you are poetry. |
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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
dont worry i wouldnt show my family any of my poems...and cuz im a nice person i dont tell him i hate him either but he really brought on the hate himself so ya know. and im not sorry i had to write this poem everythings ok. Dont knock on deaths door ...... ring the bell and run......he hates that |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
*hugs* hope everything will be okays hun. *gives u a red sucker for helpin her out*  tiff  “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
powerful poem..i liekd it much and totally related to the situation..and i thought you did a very well job on discribing the situation and i wrote some on the same subjects...anyways...cya~kat  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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JBaker515
since 2001-02-28
Posts 458Dartmouth College |
WOW...is everything with you ok?? It was really powerful..great job..hope it gets better for you..JEFF |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
i didnt get it till the second time around..but neways...i hope your doing ok..smile  *KiM* |
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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
yummy!!!! a red sucker! *opens the sucker and eats it* thank you tiff!! Thank you albert im glad i know someone that understands me. and im fine jeff, it happened a long time ago and it really doesnt matter anymore...i just thought i would write about it to get it out of my head! but im all better and my birthday is in 7 more days!! yay!see ya! Dont knock on deaths door ...... ring the bell and run......he hates that |
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dramaqueen22086 Member
since 2001-05-05
Posts 50Hadlyme, CT |
hey i thought that was really good. you are a good writter. keep up the good work. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was well done and full of emotion and power. I really enjoyed this but found the situation to be sad. Hope things get better.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
I liked this. It was really powerful (I think someone may have already said that) Good job. |
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