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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
Weak as i am Weak as i have become i will never let you win. I am tired and anoyed. In the distance i hear the boys singing 100 bottles of beer on the wall. In front i hear Damon encourging me, helping us. Ak behind me keeping me going. It is so steep i don't know if i can make it. It's all so hard. So scared, so weak. You're walking a straight bit of mountin the only way it's faceing is up. Rocks tumble, leaves fall. You know you must continue. You can see the top now just a bit further. You think. Your emotion wirling you can't believe it. You reach it and realise this isn't the top. But you know you'll get there. Sometime......... if you don't let them in they can't see the real you [This message has been edited by katherine (edited 05-05-2001).] |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
...kate i thought this was nicely done good job and...keep writing   ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 05-05-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
The ending is very positive and i like that. You did well on this.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I thought the ending was sarcastic... I got a hostile note from all of this thing, for some reason. But it really appealed to me, great job!  ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
the thing with this is i did this. it was one of the hardest days on camp last year. we got to what we thought was the top and it ended up there was like another 200m or something to go. this proberly doesn't seem like much but it was with a 20kg pack on your back when you've been walking all day. if you don't let them in they can't see the real you |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I thought the piece had a great feel to it. I enjoyed this, katherine. Nice work! --Marie Don't ever be someone's slogan, because you are poetry. |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
hehe..i like this..at first i was like ok..this is gonna be hard for me..no rythem..but it was great..i liked! *KiM* |
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