.....?\"while i look at you with my lonely eyes"

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anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

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0 posted 2001-05-05 12:03 PM

i dont know what you guys..
will think of this poem
but the meaning behind this was from the heart...

looking at you with my lonely eyes
knowing that i can never have you in my heart
as i thought i had so much to offer you
as what i really find is nothing to offer you but my love
but right now...
i don’t even have that love to give you
cause i’m left in these paths to never cross
as i walk in this path with my death within , all alone
so what is there for me ?
nothing , only for me to be...
seeing a love i can never have in my heart
as i look at you with my lonely eyes

May.5

hope you guys liked it...
even tho it was a quick write but yea...

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 05-05-2001).]

JBaker515

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since 2001-02-28

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Dartmouth College

1 posted 2001-05-05 12:07 PM

ALBY...i liked it a lot..
i just dont know quite what to get out of it, i am trying to figure outs its meaning...
making me think..
good thing!
JEFF

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

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Lynchburg, Virginia

2 posted 2001-05-05 01:00 AM

"looking at you with my lonely eyes
knowing that i can never have you in my heart"

I really like the opening. The flow here is very nice. Impulse poetry is always the best

Nice work, Al.

--Marie

Don't ever be someone's slogan, because you are poetry.

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

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Winnipeg

3 posted 2001-05-05 03:07 AM

Well done on this one, Albert. It all turned out thumbs-up, but I disagree with Marie that impulse poetry is always the best.

~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

Dopey Dope

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San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-05-05 03:07 AM

I enjoyed this one albert. I'm so tired man. Well done on the poem. It wasn't that hard to probe the meaning....good luck in the future with the women.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

DarkAngelOfTheStars
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since 2001-04-21

Posts 255

5 posted 2001-05-05 12:18 PM

nice job

a lot of people have felt this way before...and it sucks....hehe. I hope everythings ok though. see ya later and keep writing!

Dont knock on deaths door ...... ring the bell and run......he hates that

lonely*soul
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since 2001-04-05

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east haddam (moodus) ct :)

6 posted 2001-05-05 05:58 PM

wow..good job hun..i like this one alot...lonely eyes...very desciptive!
*KiM*

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