Alone In The Desert (Part 1 and 2)

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Low Man's Lyric
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since 2001-04-03

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In a dream

0 posted 2001-05-04 08:54 PM

Alone In The Desert

One man is all alone in this baren land
but all he can see is this vast sand
He walks for days and days on end
he knows he will die alone without a friend

He continues to walk with the sun glaring him down
hoping to see someone or at least a town
this man is tough and will stride some more
so he doesn't die and rot on the deserts floor

Then he comes up to a huge hill made of sand
he starts crawling up it in this baren land
but finds himself too tired to continue all the way
so he decides to rest and climb it the next day

He stands up and then continues this ordeal
while crawling, this place has a odd sense of feel
finally getting to the top he glances forward
he became still while his arms are being lowered

He can't believe what his eyes are seeing
and the pounding of his heart fleeing
it's a beautiful place full of trees and a big lake
it truly is a blessing for heavens sake

As he walks closer to this magic place
happyness and relief are visible on his face
now he has the will and hope to survive
because of this place that he will shortly arrive

He stops and looks down at this clear lake
as he looks he sees a slithering water snake
but he knows they are harmless and ignores it
then for some reason the land starts to split

Falling down as his arms are flailing
his hope and will are now failing
faster and faster down he goes
as his chances for death still grows

The ground is close and is full of mud
soon the land will know his thud
about to hit he relives everything he forsakes
but all of a sudden he awakes

He sits up and tries to catch his breath
as he forgets this dream of death
but now he remembers this hill made of sand
so he starts the climb to escape this land

Finally getting to the top he glances forward
he became still while his arms are being lowered
he can't believe what his eyes are seeing
and the pounding of his heart fleeing

Nothing but vast sand as the eye can see
this man is doomed and will never be free
such a sad fate for a man that is so wise
but he will continue his walk untill the day he dies

Well thats it, thats the rest of the story. I hope you all enjoyed it. This is the longest poem/story I have ever done.

Give her two red roses, each with a note. The first note says "For the woman I love" and the second, "For my best friend."
~Anonymous

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-05-04 09:10 PM

this was totally worth the wait..
i really liked the whole series..
the story telling was beautiful
i think you have you have somethjing for story telling poetry..imma try it for myself also..hehe but i think this is a a great piece and its already come to an end i'll miss cause i enjoyed it so much
hope you write again a poem like this definitly a fav by you...keep writing..

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 05-04-2001).]

Low Man's Lyric
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since 2001-04-03

Posts 236
In a dream

2 posted 2001-05-04 09:34 PM

Thank you, I like mixing poetry with stories and I am glad that you enjoyed this one.

Give her two red roses, each with a note. The first note says "For the woman I love" and the second, "For my best friend."
~Anonymous

lonely*soul
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since 2001-04-05

Posts 396
east haddam (moodus) ct :)

3 posted 2001-05-04 10:27 PM

wow...even tho i didnt read the series or whatev b4 this..you can kinda pick up,..and this was really good awsome job
*KiM*

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San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-05-05 02:21 AM

Good that you completed it. I was waiting and waiting for it.
well done.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

5 posted 2001-05-05 03:12 AM

Awesome job! What an amazing ending, very well done. I really enjoyed this quite a bit!
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

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