Teen Poetry #4 |
Me Looking At You |
xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
You have no idea what it's like, To be me looking at you. Knowing that there is nothing, In the world to say or do... I wish you could see yourself, Through my own eyes. Understand and appreciate, Wash away feelings of despise. For once see, Your eyes as majestic green blue. Mystical and magical, From my point of view. For once notice, Your smile so sweet, So caring and Loving... Puts you in a trace so deep. For once find, How your hands are so secure. Saving me from the world, With a love so pure. For a moment, Theres nothing i would not do. To give you just a glimpse, Of what its like to be looking at you. |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia |
Simply beautiful Good job. I think you did an extraordinary piece of work "The heart can think of no devotion |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I know this feeling.... there are a few people I feel this way about. Wonderful job in expressing it. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
wow!!!... i really enjoyed the beauty of this poem.. awesome write... i liked the way you discribed this kind of situation thru this poem.. it cant be any better written then this... great job and keep writing... ...? if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
this is definetlely a piece that i can relate to, i liked this a lot. you wrote this very beautifully, this is writing to be really proud of. keep posting all your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
this was beautiful...i really enjoyed reading it. i dont know how many times i feltlike grabing sumone and telling then what i thought of them..like really thoguht of then...just made them see how special they were in my eyes.. ..thankx for sharing.. "Life is not long and boring, |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Thanx everyone!!! I love it when people can relate to my poems Thanks for reading!! |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
Hey I really like this one!! It's so sweet and well-written and Its going in my library. Good work, and hope to see more from you soon. ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wonderful job!!!! I enjoyed this very much!!!! You wrote this in a way that was touching....very touching. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
this one is amazing it's so beautiful. wow! keep it up ~katie if you don't let them in they can't see the real you |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Your thoughts are so beautiful! This is a great poem, and one that I can relate to as well *cough cough* Nicely done, I really enjoyed this. --Marie Don't ever be someone's slogan, because you are poetry. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
OUCH!!! That is so magnificent. I love it ~*stands up and applauds*~ keep sharing Shugar "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
wow..i have nothing but good things to say bout pip poems today..this one expecially..extrodinary meaning..and its well written *KiMMiE* |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
wonderful!!! |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
this was a beautiufl poem and i felt like replying again..i really enjoyed it the first time i do again...cya~ ...? if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Awww thank you everyone for replying and saying such nice things about my poem It means a lot!! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
no Shugar.......Thank You "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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