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Bloody memories |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
A solitary drop of blood, Ran beneath the sheets. Christening the stale air, Highlighting the defeats. Exhaling out a mighty breath, She sobbed her tears of sadness. Awakening those dark sensations, Twisting them into madness. This blood had stained her comfort, And left it tinged in red. Unable to ask for an explanation, To the unshakeable words that were said. Instead a reply from down below, Contorted her face askew. Revealing only a vivid memory, That she wished to be untrue. Fearing only the inner demons, Who should have been left alone. Instead they came back to haunt her, Making her fear the unknown. Smiling at the reflection held so close, Appearing an image of rage. A chapter had closed and another, Still kept the light on centre stage. A past that was so hard to leave, Crept up and tapped her on the back. To live the nightmare once wasn't enough, Again it took the chance to attack. With this devilish plan, Came the abandonment of all hope. The blood now carried a scent, Stealing the ability to cope. Now, what does it matter? The feelings of happiness have gone astray. Now the blood that runs is dirty, And a pictorial of pain it does display. ~AnonymousFemale~ " Your mother's in here with us Karras. Would you like to leave a message? I'll see that she gets it." The Devil - The Exorcist [This message has been edited by anonymousfemale (edited 04-30-2001).] |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
i really liked the imagery in this, i've often felt like the past was sneaking up on me and waiting to attack. this is very well written, keep posting all of your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
wow! awesome poem... i loved it! pure beauty of poetry thru emotions your poem painted a picture in my head a picture so vivid so beautiful.. and i totally related to this one great job EJ..and keep writing  Exorcist:...? if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Whoaaa....very very dark here....somebody turned off all the inside lights...man this was good...Keep writing, and I hope you find some refuge someday soon... ~Carly "Your joy is your sorrow unmasked. And the self-same well from which your laughter rises was often-times filled with your tears." ~Kahil Gibran |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
OOOOH I got chills all up and down my spine... I love this! WONDERFUL job!  ~Sara~ "A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep." |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
A dark delight, just like you. Quite wonderful EJ, an excellent example of your superb style and writing talent. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done!!!!!!! very dark but a treat to meet! Mmmmmm!!!! very good! I enjoyed it....tasted great! Wondeful poem.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
*bump*page one.. this one was amazingly written... jus an example of a great poem..  ...?[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 05-01-2001).] |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
This is pretty dark Lizzy. What's going on? hope you tell me  "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Wow this is awesome AF It's going in my library. The imagery you have used is great. Mr Zu" The tree of liberty must be refreshed from time to time with the blood of patriots" -Thomas jefferson |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
This was so sad! But it was definitely written well and the words sounded like they were meant to be put together. You have a knack for writing. ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Major awesome flow on this one, the whole thing was done well. Good job "Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato. |
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