Teen Poetry #4 |
look up (its a song) |
lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
hey guys..another one of my songs..tell me whatcha think k? when the sun is always dark and theres storm clouds over head and the world has turned its back on you and theres nuttin to be said (chorus) look up and the world will turn around for you look up it cant get much worse than this i looked up and pain turned into pure bliss so look up oh oh oh oh (hehe) when darkness is consuming you and your pillows your new best friend and your thinking lots of crazy thoughts and saying its the end (:::chorus:: when nothing seems to go your way and all you do is wrong and no one wants to listen just know it wont be long look up and the world will turn around for you look up things cant get much worse than this i looked up and pain turned into pure bliss so look up ooooh ohhhh oooohhh k guys..it doesnt look the best on paper...but i think its good..and if you dont...too bad lol *KiM* |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Hey, I don't know what you have been defending your song in the post, cause i believe this song to be awesome. I do prefer MP3 files emailed to me though hint hint Keep it up Kimmie. Keep writing poems and songs as well "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I liked this |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
I liked this one too. good job. It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I really did like this one a lot too! Your songwriting skills are impressing me, it's nice to see more people getting into songwriting these days. Maybe I'll go and write one of my own. Thanks for the inspirational read! Definitely keep up with this. I'd also like an MP3. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i really liked the lyrics on this one.. you are good at this..i hope you write some depressing song..hehe if you know what i mean ..so yea.. this was a great song..keep looking up..kim ...? if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
you have a lot of talent, i've been really amazed by the last two songs you've posted. you did a great job on this and i think it would sound perfect put to music. i hope i get to see lots more of these from you, keep posting all your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I really liked the song. I especially liked the line about your pillow becoming your own best friend. I felt you did very well on this song, Oh oh oh!! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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