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ethel lahootie
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since 2001-03-06

Posts 143
SC, USA

0 posted 2001-05-03 08:19 PM

i dunno if this really makes sense...im just procrasting from doing english homework

and this just popped into my head!

I lurk in the shadows
As if not to reveal myself
Everything is seen
Yet nothing is known

You walk in the streets
Saying here I am
Nothing is seen
Yet everything is known

Together we’ll never be
Me in the shadows
You in the street
A little part of us missing
Everything and nothing
Of you and me

darn! i guess i have to go do english now

~jObEtHlE~

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-05-03 08:30 PM

i liked this poem...
the meaning was something
i related to..
thanks for sharing....
and good luck on the english homework

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

ethel lahootie
Member

since 2001-03-06

Posts 143
SC, USA

2 posted 2001-05-03 08:41 PM

hahaha thanks...english is not goin good tho! im bored outta my mind...thats y im bac on the comp so soon! hehe

thanks again
~jO~

LoneWolf
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since 2001-03-10

Posts 384
IL

3 posted 2001-05-03 11:04 PM

I liked this poem alot i can also relate to it. good job

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.

I've learned that even when you

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

4 posted 2001-05-04 12:08 PM

Hey, if it gives you more time to write poetry, send ME your English homework. I'm procrastinating from my poetry writing myself!
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-05-04 04:51 PM

I thought you did ok. Not my favorite poem by you but still good.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

6 posted 2001-05-04 05:45 PM

Very nice. I enjoyed this.. nicely done.

--Marie

Don't ever be someone's slogan, because you are poetry.

Isabel Galaxia
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since 2000-06-18

Posts 733

7 posted 2001-05-04 07:35 PM

Hey that was good! Was English really so bad? Least it wasn't your Esp. exam!! *evil laughter*

Bel
Btw, what would you do?!?! LOL!

ethel lahootie
Member

since 2001-03-06

Posts 143
SC, USA

8 posted 2001-05-04 09:44 PM

hehehe thanks for replying yall
bel-i dunno...what would u do if ur son was at home crying all alone!? hehe
thanks again!
~jO~

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

9 posted 2001-05-08 06:21 PM

I believe you did a pretty good job on this. but it definitely has potential. I'd like to see you revise it and post it again when you have time. thanks for sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

vixengrl04
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since 2001-04-26

Posts 495
East Haddam, CT

10 posted 2001-05-09 10:07 AM

Oh this was really cute.

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

ScarletPoetess
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since 2001-05-09

Posts 18

11 posted 2001-05-09 10:50 AM

I really like this title. It matched the poem perfectly.. very powerful piece this is. I liked it. Good job!

Scarlet

I hurt myself today, to see if I still feel. I focus on the pain, the only thing that's real.

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

12 posted 2001-05-10 10:14 PM

Very mysterious...nice job

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