navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #4 » Gone
Teen Poetry #4
Post A Reply Post New Topic Gone Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
LoneWolf
Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384
IL

0 posted 2001-05-02 11:17 PM


“Gone”
Deepest lonely sorrows
Upon an endless seas of tomorrows
Standing there before my eyes
was seen an angel hidden, in disguise

She took my heart
That day she held my hand
I never new life until that day
She made me feel, in so many ways

She left me alone
The light that lit my way was gone
Stumbling in the darkness
Remembering feelings of bliss

No ones fault but my own
When fear took hold all was done
My angel then returned to her heavenly abode
While I am left  here completely and utterly alone

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.

I've learned that even when you

© Copyright 2001 Colin Heffernan - All Rights Reserved
knightlyshadows
Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791
obscured vision
1 posted 2001-05-02 11:49 PM


awwwwwwwwws *hugs* thats so sayad
but it was great! i loved it muchs
hope everything okays wit u!
tiff

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

U in the dark u in the pain u on the run
Living a hell living ur ghost living ur hell

DragonFang
Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522
Missouri, USA
2 posted 2001-05-02 11:50 PM


wow, nice poem. I especialy liked those last too lines. Anyway, I hope things get better for ye... I know how hard a break up can be.

"Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \
I am lost in my own mind.


banburycross
Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946
viginia
3 posted 2001-05-03 12:56 PM


i liked the format of this poem especially, the way you set this up was very interesting to me.  great job on this, you captured a lot of feeling in your words.  keep posting your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Fading Away
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Elite
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia
4 posted 2001-05-03 01:20 PM


*hugs* I hope things get better..
I enjoyed this a lot.
Thanks for sharing.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

Dopey Dope
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Moderator
Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico
5 posted 2001-05-04 01:47 PM


This was real sad and I can relate with this one a lot. If anything my whole love life can be summed up by: left to hang dry, left to die.

I enjoyed the poem....i know how it feels.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #4 » Gone

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary