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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
I hear you crying out for hellp I come I see you reaching out your hand I grasp I feel you hurting on the inside I comfort I smell the pride you exude I ease I taste the bitterness you hide I forgive I sense you drawing away I let go “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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Angel Bee Member
since 2001-01-30
Posts 176Virginia |
i liked this poem, good job. keep writing, ~ab~ *~Sometimes just holding hands is holding on to everything.~* |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Nice job! Good use of verbs, great format, very creative!  You are a constant pleasure to read.~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
This was very good. Nice work. powerful imagery and imapct. Regina "Take a look at my face, there's no price I won't pay |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
this poem was nice.. good job! and keep wrting   ...?death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was grea, but why did you left go? If anything you should hold on to something you love as long as possible. Anyhow, nicely done.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
i let go becuz they needed the space and time of me not being there. when they are ready to come back to me if they do at all......they will! atleast thats wut i believe javier. tiff  “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
So simple and yet so powerful..I like this alot. Its hard to let go of something that you love, but if you really love it, letting go may be the best thing to do. Great work on this, its going in my library. ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Awesome...proven again: "simplicity is beauty" "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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