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Godsend_1 Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 247great state of illinois |
living in a fireplace living in flames living in inferno help me living in a cloud living in a breeze living in a gail help me living in the ocean living in the sea living in the deep help me living in the forest living in the trees living in the undergrowth help me living in a faerie tale living in a dream living in a fantasy help me and i scream help me i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be......so deal with it [This message has been edited by Godsend_1 (edited 05-02-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked it. Thought you did well.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
ok you had to explain all the symbolism in this one to me *feels stupis nows* lol but i get it now! yay mes  this is my fav of yours so far ben as in style and meanin of it! go you babAy!!!!i love you muchs tiff  “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Very nice work! I enjoyed this a whole lot.. the repitition makes the poem very powerful. Nicely done. --Marie Don't ever be someone's slogan, because you are poetry. |
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AngelPoet87 Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 280Indy |
Really good one, Ben, I like it alot. Take care of urself hun. And no more chuggin syrup, kay? Lol, ttyl. luv, ali |
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