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Sabriel.s.h.lover
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since 2001-04-16

Posts 73
b.f.e. aka- Hickville

0 posted 2001-04-22 06:44 PM

I'm racked with pain for my love's broken heart,
Oh how it hurts me to see him fall apart.
He says he wishes the memorues would die,
Then he slowly breaks down and begins to cry.

Oh how I wish I could help him heal,
For his love she could steal.
I tried to comfort him with a sweet kiss,
And to my surprise he thought it was a bliss.

He has found the love that she stole,
In my life, he played a huge role.
He found my love was a lifesaver,
He said it was such a sweet favor.

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

1 posted 2001-04-23 12:59 PM

Nice job on this poem, I enjoyed it.

~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

Bishop
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since 2001-04-22

Posts 30
Nottingham, England

2 posted 2001-04-23 02:00 AM

I like this. Well done!

MindlessPoet
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since 2001-04-20

Posts 106
Texas

3 posted 2001-04-23 02:01 AM

nice, happy one

*TiMMYBoY*
Yeah, that's me. The Weird One.

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

4 posted 2001-04-23 11:51 AM

I enjoyed this! Nicely done.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-04-24 03:35 PM

I have a question....is it lifesaver....or lifesavor?....cuz.....cuz i said lifesaver and somebody made fun of me cuz that's a candy....or is it?
I'm confoooozed.

Anyhow nice poem and it's good to see he likes you.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Godsend_1
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since 2001-04-19

Posts 247
great state of illinois

6 posted 2001-04-25 04:01 AM

wow you are great sabriel i really love your stuff a ton *hugs* keep it up hun i love you

ben redshaw the great and now teary eyed

i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be......so deal with it

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

7 posted 2001-04-25 04:04 PM

enjoyed much by me
great poem..kepp writing

...?

death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

8 posted 2001-04-29 10:33 PM

good for you. seems like you're world is shaping the way you would want it to. hope he is better, specially with that magical kiss of yours

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

9 posted 2001-05-03 05:36 PM

This is so sweet!!! Sounds like everything workd out perfectly

AngelPoet87
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since 2001-04-21

Posts 280
Indy

10 posted 2001-05-03 05:43 PM

aww, thats really sweet!

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