>>>Sonnet #1<<< (Do you name sonnets? my first sonnet...)

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Virgil
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since 2000-12-29

Posts 43
Toronto, Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2001-01-21 01:03 PM

Ok...my first sonnet..it's a loooooove sonnet, even though it doesn't refer to anyone in particular.

Sonnet #1

Upon laying eyes on you, I did think,
That you were deserv'd of equal beauty.
And so set I out to the worldly brink,
In search of such, setting it my duty.
To return with gifts of splendor, I would;
Faultless locks of gold, eyes of sparkling blue,
I find these all, yet still misunderstood.
T'will take much more to find such beauty true!
In ludicrous vain, thousands did I spend,
In the exquisite things I demanded.
But back with you now, I do comprehend,
Why I have returned so empty-handed.
O, splendor like yours I cannot pursue,
For no beauty can match that seen in you.

jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01

Posts 1118
State of Despair

1 posted 2001-01-21 01:14 PM

almost like Shakespears, "Shall I compare thee to a summers day."
This is awesome.. I name my Sonnets... for example.. Sonnet II - Winter Envy... I dont know if that matters or not...
this sonnet was so excuisite (spelling) and I hope you write more of these because they really do bring out your talent

~JDR

"Is it love in my gut, or piss in my bladder?" -Allan Riverwood

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-01-21 01:15 PM

Wow, this was great. I really REALLY liked this one. Good job!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Virgil
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since 2000-12-29

Posts 43
Toronto, Ontario, Canada

3 posted 2001-01-21 03:24 PM

Yeah jeremy, i remember reading your "Winter Envy." It was good...but do most poets title sonnets? Shakespeare's sonnets are all just numbered, i believe...

"By other ways, by other ferries, not here, shalt thou pass over: a lighter boat must carry thee."

"I AM CANADIAN!!"

jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01

Posts 1118
State of Despair

4 posted 2001-01-21 11:32 PM

yah, he number them, but theres no way there is a rule that says you cant title them, how would we tell them all apart?? thanks for commenting on my sonnet 80)

~JDR

(this was a cheap attempt at a bump) *grin*

"Is it love in my gut, or piss in my bladder?" -Allan Riverwood

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

5 posted 2001-01-22 05:53 PM

magnificent
you have definitely captured the beauty of how it is to admire and love someone on this piece
bravo!!!

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

Isabel Galaxia
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since 2000-06-18

Posts 733

6 posted 2001-01-22 09:40 PM

Wow this is GREAT, I'm very impressed. Keep these up ok?
Bel

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

7 posted 2001-01-23 07:48 AM

Brilliant! Absolutely brilliant! I envy anyone who can write sonnets as I am unable to do so myself. Each line just gives you such a warm feeling. It is a terrific piece.

Bravo!

~AF~

"Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment."
Buddha

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

8 posted 2001-01-23 09:02 AM

Sonnets, eh? Hmm...
Maybe I'll try one.
Great first, Virgil.
-Allan

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