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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
not my best but o well....thats not the point! you light up my darkness your the keeper of my soul you hold the key to my heart you know me through and through you always know just what to say even when i dont know myself you always know how im feeling inside even when i try to hide it from you you always know when to hold on even when i tell you to just let go you always know when to give me space even when i try to keep you near ill always hold you in my heart my love for you will never end “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” "at the touch of love anyone becomes a poet" [This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (edited 05-01-2001).] |
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chas Member
since 2001-04-08
Posts 101Lynn, ma |
it is a good poem,, Humm……..chocolate |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done! You expressed your love wonderfully! I really liked this poem. Quite sweet.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
Nice poem, I quite enjoyed it. heh, it rather reminds me of my own relationship. "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \ |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i liked the repitition in the second stanza i think it worked well... good job tiff...keep writing   ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
The couplet at the end was my favorite part of the piece, i think that was a very good way to end this piece. the repitition also really helps the mood of the poem. wonderful writing, keep posting your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I like this a lot, Tiff! It reminds me a lot of my relationship too  I enjoy reading your writing quite a bit. This was very well done. Nice work. --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Not your best but still a great read. you and JBaker should share ideas keep sharing Tiff hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Allan, Val, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Michele, |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
who is monitoring if this is your best or not?????? I like to think our best has yet to be written I liked this very much SEA |
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Dr. Jo-Bizz Member
since 2001-06-06
Posts 97 |
sounds like YHWH to me. Psalm 139. dr. jo But His word was in my heart |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Your love was expressed beautifully! Isnt it funny, when in love, it seems the person knows you just a little bit better then you know yourself at times?? How does that happen?? LOL...I liked it a lot...keep em comin! |
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MoeRocko Member
since 2001-04-25
Posts 166West Virginia |
WoW Tiff...... kinda late getting to this one, but I Love this one! Great Write This Is Not Here |
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