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takemeawaytoday
Junior Member

since 2001-04-30

Posts 13
Missouri

0 posted 2001-04-30 02:23 AM

You said you would always love me
So I believed it
You said I would always be the ONLY one
So I believed it
You said you would never hurt me
So I believed it
You said you would never leave me
So I believed it

Putting all my trust in you
Wondering if all you said was true
Hoping, praying, that it was true

Finding it wasn't true
I become so blue
Putting my trust in you
Knowing it wasn't true
Sometimes we put our trust in the wrong things or people. We need to look to the one who created us and remember HE is the ONLY one that we can fully put our trust in.

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

1 posted 2001-04-30 09:47 AM

Hmm... a nice poem but I personally don't agree with the afterthought.
Still I liked the varition in stanza sizes progressively, it made this really have a good appearance and it read through uniquely.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

vixengrl04
Member

since 2001-04-26

Posts 495
East Haddam, CT

2 posted 2001-04-30 11:49 AM

You never really know who you can trust, and sometimes you cant trust anyone at all...I like this, but towards the end it lost its rythym and was hard to follow. Maybe you could clear that up, and I think the whole thing would read alot better.

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

Child of the Stars

Senior Member

since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

3 posted 2001-04-30 03:26 PM

Ahh, yeah I know how dealing with trust is. But sometimes you can't help but feel like someone can be trusted with everything...And the afterthought got me ta thinkin. Great job.

~Carly

"Your joy is your sorrow unmasked. And the self-same well from which your laughter rises was often-times filled with your tears." ~Kahil Gibran

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-04-30 10:30 PM

I liked the poem, but the afterthought....naaaa....i believe you can trust more people than just one.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

5 posted 2001-04-30 10:41 PM

i liked the poem and i glad that lot of people r writing more on the spiritual side..
great job on the poem and keep writing

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

Heavens Tears

Senior Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

6 posted 2001-05-01 09:08 AM

Trust is something hard to put into others. In my opinion(just an opinion) you can trust people, but it takes me a long time to develop that trust. Give it time, it may happen!

*~*Amanda*~*

My tears roll right down my cheeks, but they all soak into my pillow. I feel kinda sorry for it...

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

7 posted 2001-05-01 02:25 PM

Trusting someone can sometimes be the hardest thing that one has to do. I know what you're talking about here.. I had a trusting issue too for a long time. It's hard to overcome, but can be done.
Nice poem.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

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