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Dopey Dope

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0 posted 2001-04-29 08:43 PM

Willow's Secret:

The weeping willow stands alone
Upon its grassy mound.
Overlooking a lake unknown
Not wanting to be found.

The passing seasons run by fast.
Winter presently reigns.
Frosty cold will not always last.
But, oh, the nature pains.

The weeping willow lost its leaves,
And the lake froze so cold.
Nature's sorrow we seldom grieve,
A secret never told.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

[This message has been edited by Dopey_Dope (edited 04-29-2001).]

knightlyshadows
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1 posted 2001-04-29 08:48 PM

whoa! excellent javier!!
this be goin to me library

tiff

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

"at the touch of love anyone becomes a poet"

knightlyshadows
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2 posted 2001-04-29 08:49 PM

darn u allan! i forgot to hit the button.
grrrrrrrrrr @ it!

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

"at the touch of love anyone becomes a poet"

Allan Riverwood

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3 posted 2001-04-29 08:56 PM

Oh my, this is so solemn, I really love it.  Your new stuff is really impressive, Javier.
The feelings I got from this are indescribable, I think I've gotten the feel to start writing quality work again.
Thanks for the boost.  This poem seriously gave me a feeling in my stomach, amazing work man.
I'm adding it to my library.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

Alwye

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4 posted 2001-04-29 09:24 PM

Deeply beautiful, my friend. I loved this, keep up the amazing work. You've got a lot of talent.

*Krista Knutson*

"We can all become what we aspire to be
If Heaven's here on Earth..." ~Tracy Chapman

coyote
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5 posted 2001-04-29 09:52 PM

Again, I must say:
A fine work, Javier.
Keep 'em coming.

"The rose, like the cactus flower, protects herself with thorns. We however, impale ourselves on their beauty."
coyote

anonymous albert ?

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6 posted 2001-04-29 11:47 PM

the symbolism you used in here was great..
the emotion you showed thru nature and way you put it together wow...
well...this is what i saw in this poem
i enjoyed this one..
amazing poem..
keep writing

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 04-29-2001).]

Ina
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7 posted 2001-04-30 09:59 AM

This was great Javier. Havent seen many of your new posts. Great work!

Regi

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To say these words to you"bon jovi

vixengrl04
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8 posted 2001-04-30 11:46 AM

This poem makes me think about how weird it would be if trees knew secrets. Maybe that willow is weeping for some unknown reason..Hmmm..Quite good, I like the rhyme scheme.

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

keoni
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9 posted 2001-04-30 12:51 PM

MAN! Dopey, this has to be one of my favorites from you. Simply amazing. I can't praise it enough. It's in my library.
Jon

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"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

keoni
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10 posted 2001-04-30 12:52 PM

OK, now it's in my library. GOSH, I can be an idiot sometimes!

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine
"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

anonymous albert ?

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11 posted 2001-04-30 12:54 PM

LOL

hehe...as i said eariler this poem was amazing

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

banburycross
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12 posted 2001-04-30 01:30 PM

you wrote this beautifully, and the symbolism and feeling of this piece is amazing. great job on this, this one is a poem for my library.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Suga_Baby
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13 posted 2001-04-30 04:42 PM

Ooooh mysterious! This kinda reminds me of the Weeping Willow poem from the move My Girl *sniff sniff* So sad....

"A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep."

Isabel Galaxia
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14 posted 2001-04-30 05:35 PM

Very good, has a great flow to it. Nice pic btw

aww such a clean cut "latin boy"!

Bel

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15 posted 2001-04-30 06:22 PM

I loved this.

This was great!
~IRIS

Terryloveiris_85
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16 posted 2001-04-30 06:22 PM

I loved this.

This was great!
~IRIS

sorry, hit the button twice

[This message has been edited by Terryloveiris_85 (edited 04-30-2001).]

Dopey Dope

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17 posted 2001-04-30 11:45 PM

Thanks all for the replies!!!
*bows* hehe

oh....and me? A clean cut latin boy?!?! HA!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Fading Away

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18 posted 2001-05-01 01:46 PM

I'm impressed, Javi. I read this over and over, and each time I read it I picked up on things I missed before. This is an amazing post, and it's going in my library. Beautiful work.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

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19 posted 2001-05-01 01:54 PM

Hey,

Superb as always dopey

I agree with what Marie said thats why all your works go into my library so I can read them over and over

Until your next masterpiece

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

Isabel Galaxia
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20 posted 2001-05-01 03:21 PM

Hey I'm entitled to stretch the truth right?

It's not like I said I was a clean cut latin girl!!
Bel

Kit McCallum

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21 posted 2001-05-01 03:32 PM

Bravo Javier! Oh I really loved your thoughts in this beautiful piece, wonderful phrasing ... very nicely written!

Best wishes,
/Kit

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22 posted 2001-05-01 04:05 PM

Very well done, Javi.
Good job buddy.

"I've come too close to happiness, to have it swept away,don't think I can take the pain, never fall again..." Janet

JBaker515

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23 posted 2001-05-01 04:06 PM

Javier, like usual. AMAZING.
I love your work. This one was great, i want to see more , i like your short poems a lot.
Peace for now.. talk to you soon
bye bye
Jeff

cherish
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swimming in fairy floss...........

24 posted 2001-05-01 08:32 PM

AWWWW!!
this was sooo awesome....i LOVE your BRAIN!!!
grrrr...you can be so frustrating javvie..i hate you..
nah you know i love you...but im jealous.

LOVED the poem elephants, elephants elephants!!
*runs*

"Life is not long and boring,
it's short and compelling." -Javier Agosto-

anonymous albert ?

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25 posted 2001-05-01 08:36 PM

...........................?

ohh..yea dont mind me javi.great poem tho

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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lonely*soul
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26 posted 2001-05-01 08:36 PM

wow~~~ exelente!!!  ive read 2 wicked awosme poems today  (among others)  and darn javi...this has got to be one of the bests ive read on passions...awosme job...please please please post more!!!
     *KiM*

(nikki, (vixengrl04)  your crazy lol)

Acies

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27 posted 2001-05-10 10:08 AM

One of my favs of your Dopey
You're always an excellent read
Share more like you used to

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So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Marshalzu

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28 posted 2001-05-10 10:26 AM

Excellent stuff javier, thought it was great and i'm putting it in my library

Zu

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29 posted 2001-05-10 09:02 PM

Wow Dopey. This one stunned me.

"Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato.

Dopey Dope

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30 posted 2001-05-15 03:57 AM

Thanks guys....

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31 posted 2001-05-15 09:44 AM

Oh jeez...now this is where the guilt comes into play because I didn't see this earlier.

This seriously made me want to read it over and over again. Has anyone told you lately that you rule? Well you do. This piece is simply unreal! It definitely has found a place in my library with all the other Dopey pieces.

~AF~

Stupidity killed the cat. Curiosity was framed.
~ Unknown ~

Dopey Dope

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32 posted 2001-05-15 02:27 PM

Liz, you are always WAY TOO KIND....I wasn't going to post this because I felt it was crappy. Not completely, I mean it did have some nice things about it, but I felt it wasn't that good.
Thanks though, you all make me feel a bit better about my writing all the time.

Dusk Treader

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33 posted 2001-05-20 10:54 PM

I like the scene here and the weeping willow. How many of us know when we've lost our leaves and grieve in icy pain... All the world seems like a frozen lake, what once was full of wonders and and possiblity is now hard and unforgiving...

I just liked the thoughts brought up in my mind. Awesome Javier, just awesome.

"There's nowhere to set my aim
So I'm everywhere" - Dream Theater

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34 posted 2001-05-20 11:01 PM

I feel for the willow tree...Can I be a willow tree?

Great poem! What's a library?

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35 posted 2001-05-21 12:51 PM

it's great. i love this poem... so solemn and full of imagery. it's great i love it!
love peace and eyeliner
angel
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36 posted 2001-05-21 07:01 PM

This is something i can't even pick an adjective for...incredible, amazing, powerful, beautiful, flowing, full of life...i don't know. Click add to library button here.

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37 posted 2001-05-22 10:42 AM

This is a very insightful poem. Do you write prose? I can see you being great at short stories that provoke people to think, because you are a deep thinker. Just to think you said so much is sucl a small poem...that's powerful!

joycerogers
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38 posted 2001-05-22 10:42 AM

This is a very insightful poem. Do you write prose? I can see you being great at short stories that provoke people to think, because you are a deep thinker. Just to think you said so much is sucl a small poem...that's powerful!

joycerogers
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39 posted 2001-05-22 10:46 AM

Dopey,

You ain no dope. This is a beautiful deep poem. Very thought provoking to say the least.

Observe the animals and they shall teach you the nature of life in man. Oberve the earth and it shall reveal the nature of life in God.

- Joyce Rog

zarina
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40 posted 2001-05-22 12:36 PM

what can I say? it was beautiful.. Its the first poem of yours I've read. You're really a good writer!

mistic
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41 posted 2001-05-22 01:44 PM

awesome imagery

Dopey Dope

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42 posted 2001-05-22 08:38 PM

Muchas Gracias...

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43 posted 2001-05-23 02:33 AM

hey nerd look i pressed the right button this time haha! well anyways.... it was nice to talk to ya on icq. great poem by the way!
robin

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cherish
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swimming in fairy floss...........

44 posted 2001-05-23 02:49 AM

hahaha..ok i feel real guilty about the other one...so im going to say how much i love this one again....i love love love love love love love love love love love it!!!...there!

Child of the Stars

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45 posted 2001-05-23 07:20 AM

I didn't reply..sheesh...fergive meh...
Well Javiwavi...I've got pretty much the same response as the rest of the world. Stunned. The..the..the..feeeeling in this really got to me. Awesome awesome....
~Carly

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Child of the Stars

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46 posted 2001-05-23 07:21 AM

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47 posted 2001-05-24 01:20 PM

er, will it be enough to say that i ditto?

xShUgArHiGhx

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48 posted 2001-05-24 02:18 PM

WWWWWWWOooooooooooooooooWWWWWWWWW

I really liked this!! It was so beautifully written and it flowed so well

Great job!

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