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Low Man's Lyric
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since 2001-04-03

Posts 236
In a dream

0 posted 2001-04-29 02:07 AM

My Love Was For You

I did love you long ago,
it was so hard for me to say hello.
You turned my black heart red,
love was what my heart was fed.

Now we just say hi or hey,
I wish there is more that we can say.
I'll always remember you in my heart,
it's so sad that we are far apart.
I wonder if we were ever ment to be,
till this day I wonder but I'll never see.

Now I have to turn around and walk the other way,
hoping to feel that love again one day.
This trail I walk is a lonely and dark path,
it holds my lust, greed and unforgiving wrath.
No one shall walk with me or hold my hand,
because this place is in my mind and not on land.

I am like a shooting star that is passing by,
when it burns up no one will cry.
I hope you will never forget my love for you,
that was the only thing in my life that was so true.

Give her two red roses, each with a note. The first note says "For the woman I love" and the second, "For my best friend."
~Anonymous

Low Man's Lyric
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since 2001-04-03

Posts 236
In a dream

1 posted 2001-04-29 02:27 AM

I forgot to add this to my library. So just ignore this and carry on.

Give her two red roses, each with a note. The first note says "For the woman I love" and the second, "For my best friend."
~Anonymous

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

2 posted 2001-04-29 03:02 AM

*claps*
Nice job!  Good format, and a very good ending.  Quite emotional.
Best wishes to you, Aaron.

~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

banburycross
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since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

3 posted 2001-04-29 11:28 AM

Great job on this, the last stanza was especially well done. the emotion throughout was terrific. keep posting all your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Suga_Baby
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since 2000-08-06

Posts 380
Maine, USA

4 posted 2001-04-29 12:25 PM

*sniff sniff* This reminds me of how I feel about Paul sometimes

I like this a lot, very good job!

"A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep."

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

5 posted 2001-04-29 01:28 PM

"I hope you will never forget my love for you,
that was the only thing in my life that was so true."

i really liked that part of the poem it ended the poem very nicely..
great job and keep writing

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2001-04-29 08:10 PM

Very well done here. I enjoyed it!
You did well!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

AngelShell
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since 2000-03-01

Posts 446
not heaven nor hell so...

7 posted 2001-04-30 01:18 AM

This is so good.

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

8 posted 2001-05-09 12:17 PM

You did pretty well on this one
You've expressed yourself really well
thanks for sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Lovely_Kris
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since 2000-07-11

Posts 176

9 posted 2001-05-09 05:22 PM

I think you did a great job and I really enjoyed reading your poem. Keep up the great work and I'm looking forward to reading more.
Lovely_Kris

vixengrl04
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since 2001-04-26

Posts 495
East Haddam, CT

10 posted 2001-05-09 05:40 PM

This is really sad, and I'm sorry that you lost this person. Hopefully things will turn up for you. Good work on the poem.

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

11 posted 2001-05-09 08:03 PM

Yes, excellent job of expressing these emotions in the poem!

"Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato.

Low Man's Lyric
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since 2001-04-03

Posts 236
In a dream

12 posted 2001-05-09 08:17 PM

It's nice to see this one back up here, thanks for all your replies. Hmmm odd how I wrote this and when I just read it I felt sad, maybe because I wrote this from my heart. Oh well carry on.

Give her two red roses, each with a note. The first note says "For the woman I love" and the second, "For my best friend."
~Anonymous

Allysa

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since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

13 posted 2001-05-10 08:35 AM

LML: Your poem touched me soooooooooo deeply.

but it made me sad too. Anyways, until your next poem, ME.

I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to. I never thought that I couldn't.
Life's tough, get a helmet.

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